Lairis' Art Thread. CRITIQUE PLEASE!!
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Lairis' Art Thread. CRITIQUE PLEASE!!
Hi! I'm Lairis!
I'm looking to improve my art, so criticism is more than welcome! I've been practicing sprites and CGs, and I would really appreciate some feed back! Here are three mock up male sprite designs I've been working on recently: and some older female mock up sprites (more just character deisgns really) As for CGs, I've designed some for a game that hasn't come out yet and they contain spoilers, so I'm just going to post some other illustrations I've done (again, criticism is really appreciated)
I'm looking to improve my art, so criticism is more than welcome! I've been practicing sprites and CGs, and I would really appreciate some feed back! Here are three mock up male sprite designs I've been working on recently: and some older female mock up sprites (more just character deisgns really) As for CGs, I've designed some for a game that hasn't come out yet and they contain spoilers, so I'm just going to post some other illustrations I've done (again, criticism is really appreciated)
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Re: Lairis' Art Thread. CRITIQUE PLEASE!!
Your CGs are really good! I especially like the second to last one ^^
If I didn't know any better, I'd think you were a professional at first glance! Keep it up and I wish you luck on your future work~
If I didn't know any better, I'd think you were a professional at first glance! Keep it up and I wish you luck on your future work~
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Thank you so much for your comment! It made me feel really good!Mama J wrote:Your CGs are really good! I especially like the second to last one ^^
If I didn't know any better, I'd think you were a professional at first glance! Keep it up and I wish you luck on your future work~
Although I'm faaaaaaar from professional!
Re: Lairis' Art Thread. CRITIQUE PLEASE!!
Lairis wrote:Thank you so much for your comment! It made me feel really good!Mama J wrote:Your CGs are really good! I especially like the second to last one ^^
If I didn't know any better, I'd think you were a professional at first glance! Keep it up and I wish you luck on your future work~
Although I'm faaaaaaar from professional!
I don't know why you say that, you're art is so eye-catching
Re: Lairis' Art Thread. CRITIQUE PLEASE!!
In "flurtt3" are they on a cliff??
Anyways, This is for the first male sprite:
And this is for the second one:
Hope it helps ^^
Anyways, This is for the first male sprite:
And this is for the second one:
Hope it helps ^^
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Re: Lairis' Art Thread. CRITIQUE PLEASE!!
If I had to guess the character's age, I would say it's somewhere between 18 and 25.Lairis wrote:...
and some older female mock up sprites (more just character designs really)
sprite 2.jpg
I mainly thought about the character's outfit. As far as I can tell, it consists of...
* An elaborate earring
* A necklace with a large hoop
* A lavender shirt with a ruffled neck
* A black undershirt
* A belt which seems rather large
* Three wristbands
* Athletic shorts
* Tights (stockings?)
* Lavender boots which don't seem to have laces or clasps
The outfit isn't necessarily bad. However, it has a lot of details. So many aspects of it seem to call for the viewer's attention. Does the character need, or even like wearing, all of the accessories? Does her outfit make sense in her fictional world? Does it make sense regarding the character's personality?
I don't mind how there is a gap between the character's shorts and tights ("zettai ryouiki"). However, I'm not sure if it's necessary.
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Thank you so much! ^_^
not sure what I was thinking! Although the tie is supposed to be short (I was using a reference for the tie and the pants--he's not specifically supposed to be a business man, he's slightly more causal, so I wanted the tie to be shorter and the pants and shoes aren't business pants and shoes, but I realize now that should make that clearer within the picture, as people do assume these things from the rest of the visual cues).
Also I realized now there were a lot of mistakes that I was aware of when I was drawing them, but I became too lazy to fix up while I was coloring it, or that I neglected to think about while drawing them, and I thought nobody would catch them! I'm glad somebody did, it makes me more motivated to fix them while actually drawing them, rather than wave them off as unnecessary! I also forget some times that people can't read my mind, and I should make it clearer through visual cues what kind of person they are.
Also--yes! Thank for the expression advice, it's something I've specifically had a problem with!
Thank you again for your advice! It was super helpful!
That one was a fan art, so I wasn't really thinking about it in terms of naturalism, but rather in terms of stylistic composition. So, honestly, I'm not sure where they are, lol."In flurtt3" are they on a cliff??
I realized now I should have changed the rest of the shirt when I redrew the pose, haha. Also, I just realized that I didn't use a reference for the shirt at all, which I'mAnyways, This is for the first male sprite
not sure what I was thinking! Although the tie is supposed to be short (I was using a reference for the tie and the pants--he's not specifically supposed to be a business man, he's slightly more causal, so I wanted the tie to be shorter and the pants and shoes aren't business pants and shoes, but I realize now that should make that clearer within the picture, as people do assume these things from the rest of the visual cues).
Oh, that's how you get the glowing effect, thank you! And yeah, I wasn't really thinking about what ears they were supposed to be, I should have used a specific animal as a reference! I was just thinking about a generic Kemonomimi, though I choose to refer to him as a cat in my head afterwards, because that is the closest to what he looks like!And this is for the second one:Hope it helps ^^
Also I realized now there were a lot of mistakes that I was aware of when I was drawing them, but I became too lazy to fix up while I was coloring it, or that I neglected to think about while drawing them, and I thought nobody would catch them! I'm glad somebody did, it makes me more motivated to fix them while actually drawing them, rather than wave them off as unnecessary! I also forget some times that people can't read my mind, and I should make it clearer through visual cues what kind of person they are.
Also--yes! Thank for the expression advice, it's something I've specifically had a problem with!
Thank you again for your advice! It was super helpful!
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I never really considered what her age was now that I think about it, but I guess that's about right? (If you're referring too the "older" part though, I meant I did them awhile ago, not the character's actual age, though if you got that, it's fair enough, I should have worded that better).If I had to guess the character's age, I would say it's somewhere between 18 and 25.
Yeah, you're right! I did this one when I was trying to figure out how to do more "interesting" out fits (also when I was first figuring out how to use Sai paint Tool). However I kinda remember getting so caught up in finding different things to put on her that, reflecting back on it now, it all became a bit Hodge-bodged.I mainly thought about the character's outfit.
As far as I can tell, it consists of...
* An elaborate earring
* A necklace with a large hoop
* A lavender shirt with a ruffled neck
* A black undershirt
* A belt which seems rather large
* Three wristbands
* Athletic shorts
* Tights (stockings?)
* Lavender boots which don't seem to have laces or clasps
The outfit isn't necessarily bad. However, it has a lot of details. So many aspects of it seem to call for the viewer's attention. Does the character need, or even like wearing, all of the accessories? Does her outfit make sense in her fictional world? Does it make sense regarding the character's personality?
I don't mind how there is a gap between the character's shorts and tights ("zettai ryouiki"). However, I'm not sure if it's necessary.
I'll definitely keep that in mind when designing future designs!
Thank you so much for your feed back!
Re: Lairis' Art Thread. CRITIQUE PLEASE!!
Yeah, better to take a bit of time to plan things before starting lol you will end up with less mistakesLairis wrote: Oh, that's how you get the glowing effect, thank you! And yeah, I wasn't really thinking about what ears they were supposed to be, I should have used a specific animal as a reference! I was just thinking about a generic Kemonomimi, though I choose to refer to him as a cat in my head afterwards, because that is the closest to what he looks like!
Lol you made my day! Yeah, some mistakes should be fixed and some others not coz sometimes "mistakes" make things look nicer, like the exaggerated expressions I talked about or sketches look nicer than final lineartLairis wrote: Also I realized now there were a lot of mistakes that I was aware of when I was drawing them, but I became too lazy to fix up while I was coloring it, or that I neglected to think about while drawing them, and I thought nobody would catch them! I'm glad somebody did, it makes me more motivated to fix them while actually drawing them, rather than wave them off as unnecessary! I also forget some times that people can't read my mind, and I should make it clearer through visual cues what kind of person they are.
We all had a problem with it lol I found something interesting in the past but now can't find it that could help you...Lairis wrote: Also--yes! Thank for the expression advice, it's something I've specifically had a problem with!
But, found something similar---> https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/73 ... 106704.jpg
This is also helpful--> http://img01.deviantart.net/7386/i/2009 ... mcohen.jpg
I know you don't draw animals but this can also clear what I mean --> https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/73 ... b76ac8.jpg
Cartoons can be very helpful with exaggerated expressions. This one is nice one --> https://s-media-cache-ak0.pinimg.com/73 ... d81440.jpg
Welcome~Lairis wrote:Thank you again for your advice! It was super helpful!
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