melancha's trainwreck art

[melancha]

Hi I'm melancha I lurk sometimes and my art style is all over the place :'I

Also critiques are very welcome!! I wanna get better!

[melancha]

[robovelociraptor]

I like your artwork~ Both styles are super colorful, and your coloring and lineart are superb!! My favorites are the beach girl with the yellow background and the girl with the ferns, for different reasons. The former's composition is great, and the latter's coloring is so pretty~
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I have a critique, though, (which is mostly directed towards your anime style) your poses seem to be stiff and lacking a "flow," for lack of a better term.

Here is a redline of sorts of the picture with the 3 cute anime girls:

Quick Disclaimer: I'm still learning, so there may very well be mistakes with my own anatomy and dynamism.

1) For this one, I flipped the head in the opposite direction, and made her right arm look less stiff to fix dynamism problems. As for anatomy, I made her calves longer and her feet bigger.
2) Moved left arm back a bit and made it a bit less awkward, and changed the pose of the right arm for dynamism's sake. For anatomy, lengthened calves again and changed the position of her feet to make it more natural. *Sorry, I made the right foot too big.. ;;
3) Changed the arm positions a little bit, moved her left leg in more, and curved her braids to make a more dynamic pose. Lengthened calves and made feet bigger.

Here's some references that have helped me, if you need them:
http://damaimikaz.deviantart.com/art/Sk ... -665493616
viewtopic.php?f=46&t=40094#p426940

[melancha]

I like your artwork~ Both styles are super colorful, and your coloring and lineart are superb!! My favorites are the beach girl with the yellow background and the girl with the ferns, for different reasons. The former's composition is great, and the latter's coloring is so pretty~
--
I have a critique, though, (which is mostly directed towards your anime style) your poses seem to be stiff and lacking a "flow," for lack of a better term.

Here is a redline of sorts of the picture with the 3 cute anime girls:

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Quick Disclaimer: I'm still learning, so there may very well be mistakes with my own anatomy and dynamism.

1) For this one, I flipped the head in the opposite direction, and made her right arm look less stiff to fix dynamism problems. As for anatomy, I made her calves longer and her feet bigger.
2) Moved left arm back a bit and made it a bit less awkward, and changed the pose of the right arm for dynamism's sake. For anatomy, lengthened calves again and changed the position of her feet to make it more natural. *Sorry, I made the right foot too big.. ;;
3) Changed the arm positions a little bit, moved her left leg in more, and curved her braids to make a more dynamic pose. Lengthened calves and made feet bigger.

Here's some references that have helped me, if you need them:
http://damaimikaz.deviantart.com/art/Sk ... -665493616
viewtopic.php?f=46&t=40094#p426940

Ohhh thank you!!! //// I haven't logged it in a while; I'm so sorry for the super late reply OTL
Thank you so much for the critique! And you're right, I have troubles in poses;; I do a lot of gestures but actually thinking up of poses still gives trouble;; The links are very helpful ^7^

The red lining made me realize how awkward the poses are oh dear;; I take note of them. I think I'll remake them too if time is good to me ;;7;;
Also ahh the 1st and 3rd girl were poor attempts of foreshortening. That's why the feet were small and the calves were shorter. But I made them look disproportionate instead OTL

[melancha]

dumpppp can't draw much since school started ;;v;;

[melancha]

Environment stuff from Digital Illustration class
The only ones that I can show with minimal shame 0^0;;;;

[King-sama]

Nice colors on the backgrounds! 8D I imagine the silhouette in the second image a girl in a kimono (with sword will look cooool~)

[robovelociraptor]

Ohhh thank you!!! //// I haven't logged it in a while; I'm so sorry for the super late reply OTL
Thank you so much for the critique! And you're right, I have troubles in poses;; I do a lot of gestures but actually thinking up of poses still gives trouble;; The links are very helpful ^7^

The red lining made me realize how awkward the poses are oh dear;; I take note of them. I think I'll remake them too if time is good to me ;;7;;
Also ahh the 1st and 3rd girl were poor attempts of foreshortening. That's why the feet were small and the calves were shorter. But I made them look disproportionate instead OTL

Hey, it's okay! I do the same thing, and a lot of my own work contains a lot of static poses, and bad flow. ;; It's incredibly difficult to get a hang of it, and like I said, I'm still learning too.

I thought it was foreshortening at first, because in your other drawings foot and leg length wasn't a problem... I don't know why I went with it. >> For foreshortning, I think your foot and calf sizes are correct, but you need to start getting smaller around the waist. I kinda think of it like an upside down triangle I guess?? A little bit of blurring using a photo editor or something can help too. ^^ But, to be honest, you might want to take this advice with a grain of salt, as I'm pretty bad at foreshortening myself.

Anyway, your newly posted art is great, I'm so jealous of your coloring skills! // As King-sama said, your choice of colors are so good!!