The Whispering of Flower Petals/花落呓语 [Otome][WIP]

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The Whispering of Flower Petals/花落呓语 [Otome][WIP]

#1 Post by Sukikoko »

Hello!!!!
I'm Sukikoko, a newbie to otome game and ren'py.
This is my first project, feel kinda nervous and excited at the same time....
The game is going to be in Chinese first, and then English version will come about 2-4 weeks later.


- Name: The Whispering of Flower Petals/花落呓语
- Genre: Otome
- Keywords: short, 1 V 3, bilingual,newbie debut,sweet vanilla.
- Status: WIP




MC - 17 years old high-schooler, doesn't look or act really smart but actually really good at math and science. However, she wish to study literature and philosophy in college.
Hobbies: Eat...and watch detective dramas.
Work at : Kobata (Male Character #3)'s personal library.
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Male Character#1 - MC's older brother [not by blood]. They spent most of their childhood in an orphange and were both adopted by the same couple.
Hobbies: Cooking....and being tsundere to MC.
Work at : A fast-food restaurant [part-time; he's a college student]
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Male Character#2 - MC's friend, she met him after she got adopted when she was 8, so they kinda grew up together. He is very outgoing and care-free.
Hobbies: Listen to music,anime and manga.
No Work.
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Male Character#3 - MC's boss. Young, cold( he tries to be), a little "anti-social", a realist. His family is very wealthy and so he started learning about family business before he graduate from college. He has a private library, at the top floor of the company building.
Hobbies: read,work,and organize stuffs.
Work: CEO of the Family corporation's new "child-company" - Destinina Design.
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Sprites: Tokudaya ; Elzee

Plot:
It's spring...
3 years after their parents died, 夕惕(yuteki or citi ) is now a high school senior. She lives with her brother 忘川 (Wasu) , who is 4 years older than her. She got a job as a librarian at a man's personal library, her boss is Kotaba, a strange man who is the CEO of " Destinina Design“。
Well....It's spring...
And people become greedy。
Wasu - He realizes that he wants more than just being her brother...
Hikaru - He is not satisfied with just being her friend...
Kotaba - He wants her to stay with him, only him...

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#2 Post by Lesleigh63 »

Good luck with your first otome.
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#3 Post by Quelcezot »

This is looking good, the trailer seems professional and the music creates a kind of adventurous feel.

I like the quirkiness of your character descriptions, eating and detective dramas are great hobbies!

The cast seems to have an interesting set of circumstances.

Don't worry about being nervous, if you're new to the engine though try to avoid getting stuck on small details such as how to achieve a certain effect in Renpy. It's better to focus on the assets themselves, writing, art and music and ask for help when you're tripping over boggling Renpy concerns. There are plenty of helpful people here in this forum who would be glad to help out a budding creator.
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If two people talk long enough they can explain how they feel, maybe.

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#4 Post by Akemi-Takashi »

Wonderful project, must I say!
First off, the story seems quite interesting. For your first Visual Novel, I think it's best to start with an easy story to go with so as to not stress over too many things. The characters appear to also be well-rounded so far with a neat background for each.
May I mention that there seems to be some typos at the moment? Particularly with Kobata/Kotoba/Kotaba's name.
Whelp, take it slow and easy and I hope you'll make it the game you dream of! Wonderful video, by the way!
Free to do anything related to English grammar such as proofreading or scripts! ;)

"Nothing ventured, nothing gained." (Proverb)

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#5 Post by Genesis »

I know that some of the people had said this before but the video is really well-made and adorable. That is probably the mood that you are going for, so great job! Good luck on your first VN (and I think the MC is like me in some way :D I am thinking of studying literature and philosophy in future too!)

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#6 Post by bloodyhair »

Love it! ♥♥

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#7 Post by franny »

Looks amazing! I'm excited for the finished work! :D

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