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I'd say the main problem you have is that you don't imagine how the volumes really work and shade accordingly, but instead you work on a preconceived idea of how things should be (as opposed to how they could be).
Also, her left eye seems a bit too big, even considered it's nearer to the viewer, and the mouth a bit out of centre.
I'd advise making a scheme for yourself, once you have the basic idea on paper or on screen, so that you can adjust your sketch accordingly.
Also, her left eye seems a bit too big, even considered it's nearer to the viewer, and the mouth a bit out of centre.
I'd advise making a scheme for yourself, once you have the basic idea on paper or on screen, so that you can adjust your sketch accordingly.
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Re: Art Dumpage! Show your art ^^
Invited as a guest artist, so I tried my best here... Though I missed shading /texturizing the stained glass orz.
Critiques are warmly welcomed.
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Re: Art Dumpage! Show your art ^^
10+ points for bunny cloud.
* Stop using gradients so heavily for the skin. Either you paint it with brushes, or go over the final product with brushes. The gradients make the girls look like dolls, and messes basic shading you could have easily done by hand.
This problem was also prevalent in an earlier drawing you posted, as well as your Deviant account, so I say it should be high on the "To Improve" list.
The green skirt is fine, so I don't think you really need me for explanations.
* They don't make any shadows on the bed. They "float".
* The scene has a purple sunset light, which isn't reflected at all on the girls.
* the wall should have more shading, if only to hide the fact you used a pattern. I don't have a problem with the pattern itself, but if you add the smallest hint of shadows it will look better.
* Is the purple smudge under the left girl a different blanket from the yellow one?
* Right girl has an ugly hat. This is unacceptable, since women have all the good hats, like this one.
* The rubies on the right girl's shirt don't look like they're attached to the fabric.
* The throat of the left girl needs another go, highlighting the lights. Right now it looks like a tube, instead of a rounded triangle.
* Fair warning, I don't like "cute" faces - the girl on the left has something in her eye, and she says "Baaaaaaaah". The one on the right has a retarded smile, which seems quite detached from what's happening to her friend.
Nice piece, though as you said, it's still unrefined.
* Stop using gradients so heavily for the skin. Either you paint it with brushes, or go over the final product with brushes. The gradients make the girls look like dolls, and messes basic shading you could have easily done by hand.
This problem was also prevalent in an earlier drawing you posted, as well as your Deviant account, so I say it should be high on the "To Improve" list.
The green skirt is fine, so I don't think you really need me for explanations.
* They don't make any shadows on the bed. They "float".
* The scene has a purple sunset light, which isn't reflected at all on the girls.
* the wall should have more shading, if only to hide the fact you used a pattern. I don't have a problem with the pattern itself, but if you add the smallest hint of shadows it will look better.
* Is the purple smudge under the left girl a different blanket from the yellow one?
* Right girl has an ugly hat. This is unacceptable, since women have all the good hats, like this one.
* The rubies on the right girl's shirt don't look like they're attached to the fabric.
* The throat of the left girl needs another go, highlighting the lights. Right now it looks like a tube, instead of a rounded triangle.
* Fair warning, I don't like "cute" faces - the girl on the left has something in her eye, and she says "Baaaaaaaah". The one on the right has a retarded smile, which seems quite detached from what's happening to her friend.
Nice piece, though as you said, it's still unrefined.
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Re: Art Dumpage! Show your art ^^
I'm using paint tool SAI on all my works btw, i don't use photoshop/gradients/smudge/dodge etc at all.fortaat wrote:10+ points for bunny cloud.
* Stop using gradients so heavily for the skin. Either you paint it with brushes, or go over the final product with brushes. The gradients make the girls look like dolls, and messes basic shading you could have easily done by hand.
This problem was also prevalent in an earlier drawing you posted, as well as your Deviant account, so I say it should be high on the "To Improve" list.
The green skirt is fine, so I don't think you really need me for explanations.
* They don't make any shadows on the bed. They "float".
* The scene has a purple sunset light, which isn't reflected at all on the girls.
* the wall should have more shading, if only to hide the fact you used a pattern. I don't have a problem with the pattern itself, but if you add the smallest hint of shadows it will look better.
* Is the purple smudge under the left girl a different blanket from the yellow one?
* Right girl has an ugly hat. This is unacceptable, since women have all the good hats, like this one.
* The rubies on the right girl's shirt don't look like they're attached to the fabric.
* The throat of the left girl needs another go, highlighting the lights. Right now it looks like a tube, instead of a rounded triangle.
Thank you very much on pointing out my faults at the skin. Tbh they kept saying it looks like a doll but not telling me how to fix it including the shading at the neck.
I asked the leader of the group that I'm open for revisions , but they were okay with it already.
I am aware of the shadows, lack of shading on the walls.
But thank you for giving me the idea to use real life references on hats/accessories/clothing, since i have problem with it the most.
yep, it's a different blanket.
Though I kinda won't consider this one. Sounds like you're trolling rather than giving a crit My friends (who hates anime) clearly see it as curiosity love or something like that.fortaat wrote: * Fair warning, I don't like "cute" faces - the girl on the left has something in her eye, and she says "Baaaaaaaah". The one on the right has a retarded smile, which seems quite detached from what's happening to her friend.
Anyway, you're a great help. At dA I receive critiques rarely but whenever I receive one , it's so rare that I remember it. So no worries I'll guarantee less mistakes the next time around.
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Re: Art Dumpage! Show your art ^^
Decided to try one layer painting in SAI with a Pokemon OC I made up. I think it turned out okay
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Aww, how cute! I like her pokeball ties, even if red and pink don't work together. Can't do anything about it though. I kinda want to see her eyes though...
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Geh I've realised that my art quality is pretty poor compared to a lot of people here ;_;
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Mai, that's way awesome for a one layer work. She's cute as well.
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I think your art is quite fabulous.Sakurazaki wrote:Geh I've realised that my art quality is pretty poor compared to a lot of people here ;_;
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Re: Art Dumpage! Show your art ^^
Thank you so much! (sorry I haven't responded till now... I couldn't log in with chrome and I just tried FF O_O)Ren wrote:I'd say the main problem you have is that you don't imagine how the volumes really work and shade accordingly, but instead you work on a preconceived idea of how things should be (as opposed to how they could be).
Also, her left eye seems a bit too big, even considered it's nearer to the viewer, and the mouth a bit out of centre.
I'd advise making a scheme for yourself, once you have the basic idea on paper or on screen, so that you can adjust your sketch accordingly.
Sorry for my ignorance but what do you mean by scheme? (do you mean perhaps a very basic sketch? :S)
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Lol, helicopters FTW. Nice backgrounds, completely impressed. O.O
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Nice backgrounds there Mugen-dono.
I think there's only a lack in the reflections (hues or something like that) and shadows from tree to tree, to make the scenes more lively, but overall, it's quite pretty.
I think there's only a lack in the reflections (hues or something like that) and shadows from tree to tree, to make the scenes more lively, but overall, it's quite pretty.
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Very nice BGs.
I really should go over your old background guide.
* The shadows on left benches are wrong - like they're a part of the ground.
* The leaves on the right tree have an odd contour. I guess you used Photoshop's feather, and than delete, which makes it look bad. I don't know what the original looked like, so I can't offer suggestions on what you should do.
* I think you should try an "out of focus" effect on the left trees and bushes.
* The helicopter is nice, but it should fight the alien invasion.
I really should go over your old background guide.
* The shadows on left benches are wrong - like they're a part of the ground.
* The leaves on the right tree have an odd contour. I guess you used Photoshop's feather, and than delete, which makes it look bad. I don't know what the original looked like, so I can't offer suggestions on what you should do.
* I think you should try an "out of focus" effect on the left trees and bushes.
* The helicopter is nice, but it should fight the alien invasion.
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