Doppelganger (GXB,mystery,horror)+demo [on hold]
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got the demo! I like blake & raphael so far, they're both chill dudes. :D
as for errors, I hope this list isn't too long, I'm just a tad nitpicky... I didn't give rico the letter, and later yuri said "We're even now, isn't it?" should be something like "We're even now, right?" I guess~ and later anasatsia says "there re no buts!" soon after that, "spine" should be "spines". it doesn't display lee's name when he talks about how he feels bad for letting you walk to the cafe alone. the blue-hair guy says "she knows one or two about that". maybe should be "one or two things about that"? the doorbell rang after I opened the door to talk to the policeman. he says "who do you think will do this to her?", should be would instead of will, then "like weird people or weird entity...", should be entities. showed lee's photo when jun called me after a call to yuri failed. later lucia said to her mum, "...help on something, maybe lesson." should be "maybe a lesson"? after that, "I quickly grab a bread" should be "I quickly grab some bread"/"I quickly grab a slice of bread". but I guess it could be a breakfast bread? idk~ later, "while sitting on a park" should be "in the park". later still, "why did the police left your pencil box?" left should be leave. in the lines shuang has after that, she should say "be considered a clue or not", "conducted a fingerprint test on it", and then "I really think it's the last time he'll ever go there. next, "as if saying I should've go home with him" should be "gone home with him". then lee says "In case anything happens." that's a sentence fragment.
I'll stop there, I feel pretty rude >w> great game though! I have no idea if I'm even on anyone's route yet, and I'm already wrapped up in the story~
as for errors, I hope this list isn't too long, I'm just a tad nitpicky... I didn't give rico the letter, and later yuri said "We're even now, isn't it?" should be something like "We're even now, right?" I guess~ and later anasatsia says "there re no buts!" soon after that, "spine" should be "spines". it doesn't display lee's name when he talks about how he feels bad for letting you walk to the cafe alone. the blue-hair guy says "she knows one or two about that". maybe should be "one or two things about that"? the doorbell rang after I opened the door to talk to the policeman. he says "who do you think will do this to her?", should be would instead of will, then "like weird people or weird entity...", should be entities. showed lee's photo when jun called me after a call to yuri failed. later lucia said to her mum, "...help on something, maybe lesson." should be "maybe a lesson"? after that, "I quickly grab a bread" should be "I quickly grab some bread"/"I quickly grab a slice of bread". but I guess it could be a breakfast bread? idk~ later, "while sitting on a park" should be "in the park". later still, "why did the police left your pencil box?" left should be leave. in the lines shuang has after that, she should say "be considered a clue or not", "conducted a fingerprint test on it", and then "I really think it's the last time he'll ever go there. next, "as if saying I should've go home with him" should be "gone home with him". then lee says "In case anything happens." that's a sentence fragment.
I'll stop there, I feel pretty rude >w> great game though! I have no idea if I'm even on anyone's route yet, and I'm already wrapped up in the story~
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Re: Doppelganger (GXB,mystery,horror)+demo+update13/7
Yay that update makes me all warm inside! Ah this is going to be hours of my life well spent
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Thank you everyone!
Hmm, I've handed the demo to my editor so I hope there won't be mistakes like that anymore when you play the full game!
I'm done with Blake, finally. Now I'm writing this person's path who is staring at you with yandere eyes.
Hmm, I've handed the demo to my editor so I hope there won't be mistakes like that anymore when you play the full game!
I'm done with Blake, finally. Now I'm writing this person's path who is staring at you with yandere eyes.
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Raphael is next? And a yandere?azureXtwilight wrote:Now I'm writing this person's path who is staring at you with yandere eyes.
YESSS. THANK YOU AZURE.
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YANDERE? Yessss~
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Not so fast, people. ^^ Doppelganger IS a dark story after all, and most of the characters have some... problems, or others. Not necessarily yandere of course, but problems nonetheless.
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Erk...sorry the word yandere does strange things to me. But man Raphael has got the yandere look down in that pic ._.U
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Hello everyone!
I just joined this site, and I'm here to say that my brother and I are composers!
If you guys need any music for your projects just contact me!
Right now my brother and I are composing for this project Doppelganger.
Here's a forum post with information on us.
https://www.mochimedia.com/community/fo ... r-projects
Here's my e-mail: julianwyattsmith172@yahoo.com (Also my MSN)
Nice to meet you all!
Happy composing! ~ Wynn
I just joined this site, and I'm here to say that my brother and I are composers!
If you guys need any music for your projects just contact me!
Right now my brother and I are composing for this project Doppelganger.
Here's a forum post with information on us.
https://www.mochimedia.com/community/fo ... r-projects
Here's my e-mail: julianwyattsmith172@yahoo.com (Also my MSN)
Nice to meet you all!
Happy composing! ~ Wynn
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Uhm, I need to make a warning though.
As far as writing goes, this game has a "love-love meter" equivalent to frozen essence. Hmm, there's some bit of dates and love confessions... But it's more story-oriented. My point is to show how people change, and how people's wishes can cause destruction. It's meant to be a twisted story after all, and some people aren't meant to be loved. 8O
Oh, and the main mystery is not finding anastasia's attacker. It's a bit obvious actually 8D
Oh, and you can go into Shuang's path now. (Maybe an implied GXG)
Hoorrray!
As far as writing goes, this game has a "love-love meter" equivalent to frozen essence. Hmm, there's some bit of dates and love confessions... But it's more story-oriented. My point is to show how people change, and how people's wishes can cause destruction. It's meant to be a twisted story after all, and some people aren't meant to be loved. 8O
Oh, and the main mystery is not finding anastasia's attacker. It's a bit obvious actually 8D
Oh, and you can go into Shuang's path now. (Maybe an implied GXG)
Hoorrray!
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I will be conceited and believe that I had something to do with this.
Mweeheehee~
*vanish*
Mweeheehee~
*vanish*
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Something to do with what? XD
The bit about Shuang's path having implied GxG is the only thing I wasn't involved in.
The bit about Shuang's path having implied GxG is the only thing I wasn't involved in.
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Haha, yeah, that. I don't actually think that I had anything to do with that.. but.. a fangirl can dream!Kirroha wrote:Something to do with what? XD
The bit about Shuang's path having implied GxG is the only thing I wasn't involved in.
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Well, I had nothing to do with that, for sure. XDD I'm not into GxG, but I did decide on a path with Shuang, just not romantically inclined.
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