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Enerccio · #1 Post by **Enerccio** » Fri Dec 08, 2006 6:59 pm

Well its finally finished.

Playtime: Around 20 minutes.
Endings: 3 (2 good + one bad)

Thanks all for support!

Please post any comments and any errors in grammar. And please vote in pool.
Thank you!

You can find all threee distributions here: http://www.bishojo.tk

F.I.A · #2 Post by **F.I.A** » Fri Dec 08, 2006 9:59 pm

I am through playing it a whole. Well, it is fine for a short game.

Though, there are numerous ammount of grammar mistakes. Like, you did not add apostrophes when it is needed(Geez, and now I sound like an english teacher).

And there is a problem with the good ending for Michiyo. The last part of the scene is repeated twice for no apparent reason. The scene is:

From Yumi telling Takumi to go for Michiyo, till the ending. That scene is relooped at the end of Michiyo's ending.

You should work on both problems in next release.

Enerccio · #3 Post by **Enerccio** » Sat Dec 09, 2006 2:11 am

Ending changed (just download again) - damn i forgot to write jump credits

About apostrophes.. well.. i will add them sometimes (look for version 1.01)

Enerccio · #4 Post by **Enerccio** » Sat Dec 09, 2006 12:02 pm

New version 1.05 available!
Grammar mistakes corrected.
Download new version at http://www.bishojo.tk

mikey · #5 Post by **mikey** » Sun Dec 10, 2006 8:18 pm

The game had a few things about it - for instance the music was a bit too simple, and of course the whole game had the problem of graphics - because they are freely available, they don't feel all that unique - most of them I've seen somewhere else (mainly in the Shifted Demo) and Tsuina is Miss Placeholder for just about every game project ^_^. But actually, this is Tsuina's first role in a finished game, AFAIK. Donated for the Blade Engine, it's a paradox

. Also, the ending is a bit too abrupt, just a flat comment on what happens... a small epilogue would probably do the game good.

And everything else are positives. The story, I really liked it (overlooking some English typos etc...). In general, your game actually started as a typical ecchi game, but then I felt that it was more focused on love - I don't know whether you wanted this, or whether this just came as you wrote more and more - but it was nice to see. The mix is really good and it was a truly pleasant surprise for me.

I also liked some of the romantic situations - maybe not so obvious, but romantic for me when Michiyo...

...came to wish you good night every evening, I liked that a lot. And then when she got sick and you took care of her, sure it's a stereotype, but it works ^_^.

I liked the choices, you had total control of the story, even though I don't like them to be too obvious, in this game it worked, because it was this genre. All in all, a well done game, a typical romantic school comedy. I think that because of this, sometime in the future, it would also deserve original graphics. But in any case, congratulations for now.

Enerccio · #6 Post by **Enerccio** » Sun Dec 10, 2006 9:15 pm

If anyone is willing to make graphis he can do so.
Then if anyone is intrested PM me and i can send you name of all files that that game need.

Then i am still planing to update it with epilogs and so (maybe i will add music too)

musical74 · #7 Post by **musical74** » Tue Dec 12, 2006 3:27 am

I've run into a problem downloading it...about 25 % into it, it decides it's done and says *here you go* - in other words, it doesn't download correctly. It's happened 4 times...anyone else had this problem? DL the demo was fine...not sure why it's complaining about the finished version!

Once I can successfully get the full download I'll give you my comments on it

F.I.A · #8 Post by **F.I.A** » Tue Dec 12, 2006 4:38 am

musical74 wrote:I've run into a problem downloading it...about 25 % into it, it decides it's done and says *here you go* - in other words, it doesn't download correctly. It's happened 4 times...anyone else had this problem? DL the demo was fine...not sure why it's complaining about the finished version!

Once I can successfully get the full download I'll give you my comments on it

Hmm, that means that it is not only me having this problem with abrupt download end. Try to use a download manager(i.e. Getright) to get it.

Well, there is also this last part of the story I want to talk about:

When Yumi said that your love for Michiyo is all written on your face, Yumi was promptly overlayed with an angry Michiyo. I am not sure if that is intentional.

Enerccio · #9 Post by **Enerccio** » Tue Dec 12, 2006 6:27 am

Well, there is also this last part of the story I want to talk about:

When Yumi said that your love for Michiyo is all written on your face, Yumi was promptly overlayed with an angry Michiyo. I am not sure if that is intentional.

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Well, i do not understand you. Maybe Mikey can translate it?

mikey · #10 Post by **mikey** » Tue Dec 12, 2006 9:59 am

>> Vtedy ked Yumi povie ze...

"your love for for Michiyo is written all over your face"

... sa tam zrazu objavi postava Michiyo a prekryje postavu Yumi, teda su tak naskladane na seba - Michiyo zakryva Yumi - pravdupovediac sa mi to tiez zdalo take cudne. Takze neviem ci to malo byt naschval alebo to bola nejaka chybicka.

Enerccio · #11 Post by **Enerccio** » Tue Dec 12, 2006 11:53 am

mikey wrote:>> Vtedy ked Yumi povie ze...
"your love for for Michiyo is written all over your face"
... sa tam zrazu objavi postava Michiyo a prekryje postavu Yumi, teda su tak naskladane na seba - Michiyo zakryva Yumi - pravdupovediac sa mi to tiez zdalo take cudne. Takze neviem ci to malo byt naschval alebo to bola nejaka chybicka.

Jo, to je chybycka, elbo je pouzite dissolve. Ked doplnim nove engingy (asi dneska) tak to opravim. Diky

Ok it will be fixed wen new version with better endings will be posted (hopefully today) THX

Enerccio · #12 Post by **Enerccio** » Tue Dec 12, 2006 12:16 pm

Well, i am quick, new version 1.14 is all ready completed.
Please download at http://www.bishojo.tk

Watercolorheart · #13 Post by **Watercolorheart** » Tue Dec 12, 2006 5:16 pm

I downloaded it, haven't played it.

From the screenshot, my only quibble was something I usually did with my girl sprite in the classroom BG was to move it to the far right so that she wasn't standing on a desk but in the hallway portion.

Enerccio · #14 Post by **Enerccio** » Tue Dec 12, 2006 6:19 pm

BCS wrote:I downloaded it, haven't played it.

From the screenshot, my only quibble was something I usually did with my girl sprite in the classroom BG was to move it to the far right so that she wasn't standing on a desk but in the hallway portion.

LOL true

Watercolorheart · #15 Post by **Watercolorheart** » Tue Dec 26, 2006 5:18 pm

I dunno, I played it through but I didn't care for the broken English or poor grammar ... (mine says "final version 1.4).

I guess my standards are just too high for the standard writing quality I expect.

. Especially because at some point, the missing words impaired my ability to enjoy the game. I... it was unplayable for me after I was done.

I just didn't want to go through and see the other paths anymore.

Aside from that, I guess I really can't review the graphics since I drew most of them myself. It was a bit ... odd to see them used for the first time, but it was interesting.

It's been so long since I drew them that I forgot what they looked like. (But now I do mine in a different style, more soft watercolor without any lines. Difficult, but satisfying.)

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