It's the way her head is turned. Try turning your own head and see if you can look back without moving your shoulders much. The way her head is positioned, the left(Here, the right) part of her body should be lifted off the bed.LucCalar wrote:Latest digital work, I need a critique on this one. Something about it isn't right.
Ah, I see what you mean. I tried to use foreshortening on the right arm to make it appear at though she was propping herself up, but I guess that didn't work out as well as I hoped. Hence the nagging feeling of something being wrong.Hijiri wrote:It's the way her head is turned. Try turning your own head and see if you can look back without moving your shoulders much. The way her head is positioned, the left(Here, the right) part of her body should be lifted off the bed.LucCalar wrote:Latest digital work, I need a critique on this one. Something about it isn't right.
Ahh, it's your lovely avatar picture I commented on in the Guestbook thread!LucCalar wrote:Latest digital work, I need a critique on this one. Something about it isn't right.
Not only that, but the actual curvature of her upper spine into her neck is I think humanly impossible. The highlight going up her back draws attention to this. Her spine seems to be taking one direction, but her neck is taking another. (In addition, her left shoulder seems like it isn't in the correct place. I think it's primarily because the dip between it and her neck is so smooth and low. She seems to be lacking trapezius muscles.)Hijiri wrote:It's the way her head is turned. Try turning your own head and see if you can look back without moving your shoulders much. The way her head is positioned, the left(Here, the right) part of her body should be lifted off the bed.LucCalar wrote:Latest digital work, I need a critique on this one. Something about it isn't right.
One thing I noticed right away was that the foreshortening looked weird, but I think a lot of it has to do with the fact that there is very little contrast in your shading. I think there needs to be a lot more variance in your lights and darks. Things closer to the viewer shouldn't be the same color as things farther away, or they look flat. It's jarring to look at without that contrast because the color says "I'm flat" and the foreshortening says "No I'm not!"LucCalar wrote: I tried to use foreshortening on the right arm to make it appear at though she was propping herself up, but I guess that didn't work out as well as I hoped. Hence the nagging feeling of something being wrong.
I see what you mean, the spine can't do that. I have no idea why I did it that way.Sapphi wrote:Ahh, it's your lovely avatar picture I commented on in the Guestbook thread!LucCalar wrote:Latest digital work, I need a critique on this one. Something about it isn't right.
She is so cute... >w<
Not only that, but the actual curvature of her upper spine into her neck is I think humanly impossible. The highlight going up her back draws attention to this. Her spine seems to be taking one direction, but her neck is taking another. (In addition, her left shoulder seems like it isn't in the correct place. I think it's primarily because the dip between it and her neck is so smooth and low. She seems to be lacking trapeziusmuscles.)Hijiri wrote:It's the way her head is turned. Try turning your own head and see if you can look back without moving your shoulders much. The way her head is positioned, the left(Here, the right) part of her body should be lifted off the bed.LucCalar wrote:Latest digital work, I need a critique on this one. Something about it isn't right.
One thing they always do to you in art class is tell you to put away your colors for awhile and work in black and white until you can successfully master contrast. Then it's just one less thing to worry about when you go on to using more than one color. It might sound dull, but it is very relaxing to work in a monochrome scale... if you've never done it before, I would give it a shot!LucCalar wrote: Color variance is daunting for me, I've tried to use more shades but end up ruining the end result. I'll have to try the nearer colors being different than the ones that are further away in the future.
I appreciate the critique on my work, it is difficult to improve without guidance from others.
I have never been to art class so I must ask this, is there a vast different between greyscale and monochrome?Sapphi wrote:One thing they always do to you in art class is tell you to put away your colors for awhile and work in black and white until you can successfully master contrast. Then it's just one less thing to worry about when you go on to using more than one color. It might sound dull, but it is very relaxing to work in a monochrome scale... if you've never done it before, I would give it a shot!LucCalar wrote: Color variance is daunting for me, I've tried to use more shades but end up ruining the end result. I'll have to try the nearer colors being different than the ones that are further away in the future.
I appreciate the critique on my work, it is difficult to improve without guidance from others.
And you're welcome... I know the feeling. I stare at my drawings for hours like "WHY, WHY DO YOU LOOK SO WEIRD TO ME?!" And then someone else mentions in passing, "Oh, the shoulders are too wide." And then I'm like "...Oh yeah."
Per Wikipedia:LucCalar wrote: I have never been to art class so I must ask this, is there a vast different between greyscale and monochrome?
I've worked in greyscale when I was making a short manga, but only dabs of shading here and there. Aside from the cover I have not used greyscale in any of my CGs.
I should work on that, there was a lot less eyestrain working with shades of grey as well.
I tend to use the terms interchangeably (bad me) so I'm sorry if my response was confusing.Wikipedia wrote: Monochrome[1] describes paintings, drawings, design, or photographs in one color or shades of one color.[2] A monochromatic object or image has colors in shades of limited colors or hues.[clarification needed] Images using only shades of grey (with or without black and/or white) are called grayscale or black-and-white.
Ah, I see.Sapphi wrote:Per Wikipedia:LucCalar wrote: I have never been to art class so I must ask this, is there a vast different between greyscale and monochrome?
I've worked in greyscale when I was making a short manga, but only dabs of shading here and there. Aside from the cover I have not used greyscale in any of my CGs.
I should work on that, there was a lot less eyestrain working with shades of grey as well.I tend to use the terms interchangeably (bad me) so I'm sorry if my response was confusing.Wikipedia wrote: Monochrome[1] describes paintings, drawings, design, or photographs in one color or shades of one color.[2] A monochromatic object or image has colors in shades of limited colors or hues.[clarification needed] Images using only shades of grey (with or without black and/or white) are called grayscale or black-and-white.
That's why it's always good to take breaks while you're working on a piece, because you get to see it with fresh eyes when you come back. Plus taking breaks is good for the eyes, especially if you're working on a computer!Sapphi wrote: And you're welcome... I know the feeling. I stare at my drawings for hours like "WHY, WHY DO YOU LOOK SO WEIRD TO ME?!" And then someone else mentions in passing, "Oh, the shoulders are too wide." And then I'm like "...Oh yeah."
Omgosh I'm dying from cuteeee ; A ;Ruril wrote:
Pet design idea for Trickster Online.
, can some one give me some feed back? )
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