The Nightmare (GxB, otome, mystery, violence)

[silverpikachu99]

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[Hibikai]

Although your synopsis seems interesting enough, it's kind of confusing. What is the actual conflict in the story exactly? We know the MC's name, and that she was transported into another world, but how, and why? I understand that you don't want to spoil the story by revealing too much, but we need more information than that.

[Virelai]

The nightmare...DUN DUN DUN.
I can imagine this as a movie xD Lol.
Anyhoo, I agree with Hibikai. I understand your synopsis, but not understand at the same time.
I understand that you're still working atm, and it's your first VN...but, if you want an eye-catcher; a piece of advice is to make your synopsis not so...storytelling? More of a trailer sort of... not sure if you understand, but that's a good way to make things more understandable.

I'm looking forward to this! I'm not so much into violence, but...yeah, I like the way it's going!

And as you said how you'd be putting your heart and soul into it...it makes me more excited to see it!
GOOD LUCK! ♥ Ganbatte! :3 LOL.
~Christine ;*

[sake-bento]

Since this VN is still in the planning stages, I've moved the thread to the ideas forum. WiP is for games that are currently underway with finished writing, art, or other things for people to see or comment on. Feel free to request a thread move back to WiP when you've got more things you can show off. Looking forward to seeing your work!

[silverpikachu99]

Although your synopsis seems interesting enough, it's kind of confusing. What is the actual conflict in the story exactly? We know the MC's name, and that she was transported into another world, but how, and why? I understand that you don't want to spoil the story by revealing too much, but we need more information than that.

OK! Sorry, ill edit this right away!

[silverpikachu99]

The nightmare...DUN DUN DUN.
I can imagine this as a movie xD Lol.
Anyhoo, I agree with Hibikai. I understand your synopsis, but not understand at the same time.
I understand that you're still working atm, and it's your first VN...but, if you want an eye-catcher; a piece of advice is to make your synopsis not so...storytelling? More of a trailer sort of... not sure if you understand, but that's a good way to make things more understandable.

I'm looking forward to this! I'm not so much into violence, but...yeah, I like the way it's going!

And as you said how you'd be putting your heart and soul into it...it makes me more excited to see it!
GOOD LUCK! ♥ Ganbatte! :3 LOL.
~Christine ;*

Aww!! Thank you >.<

[Hibikai]

Although your synopsis seems interesting enough, it's kind of confusing. What is the actual conflict in the story exactly? We know the MC's name, and that she was transported into another world, but how, and why? I understand that you don't want to spoil the story by revealing too much, but we need more information than that.

OK! Sorry, ill edit this right away!

Its a lot easier to understand now, and it sounds interesting! Good luck!

[silverpikachu99]

Pictures of the characters will be coming soon!