Hmm, if he's around 30 or 40 then he doesn't look that much outside his age, and you did mention that he seems to be supposed to appear younger. By the way, you guys were probably going for this, but now that i think about it, the husband kind of gives me chills
And yeah, i was going to say that the GUI you showed us seemed more proper for an horror game than a drama story. Maybe you could use it for your next project!
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I can see why you wanted to digress from the plain square usual, but i admit i'm not very sure of how you could vary it... Maybe a sharp paper with one or two cuts on it?
The vertical box idea seems rather fresh/new, so i find it attractive on reason of that. Whether it is appropiate for a 2nd person narration, i don't know but i think it could work. Maybe you can "test" it, so to say, trying out a scene from the work and see how it feels.