Kessie wrote:Hey, thanks for dropping by.Boyfriend wrote:Hi hi!Steam punk isn't my thing but if you are including voices I'd audition!
Not too sure if it will include voice acting since we're still in the earliest stages of making the VN but if we do consider voice acting in the future, I'll keep it in mind to send you a PM.
and all help.. well helps. 
Thankyou so much for the huge compliment!HalYac17 wrote:Wow, defintely one of the most original and innovative ideas I've seen. Really excited to get my hands on this!
Thanks for your support! I will also pass the compliment over to the artists that we are very thankful for.merdeamour wrote:Whoa, this looks amazing! Wishing you good luck with this! (:
Firstly, your use of the word "homosexual" is jarring and a bit off-putting. While, technically, it means what you want it to, it's a very clinical word that is very rarely used with a straight face in casual conversation. You would be better off alluding to it, or using the word "gay" or "lesbian" or using time period specific slang instead.Kessie wrote:Emma:
”And in regards to rape?”
Lord Cyrus:
”You obviously haven’t heard of homosexuality…”
Emma:
"Well, I like you Lady Agatha... despite the rumours."
Lady Agatha:
"Like? Rumours?"
Emma:
"Oh 'like' in a completely non-homosexual manner that is.. and well, don't mind me about the rumours mention."
If you feel the "slender man" line is too vague, you could also clarify like so:FailedSanity wrote:Emma:
”And in regards to rape?”
Lord Cyrus:
”A slender man looks much like a woman, and rapists don't necessarily care where they're putting it.”
Emma:
"Well, I like you Lady Agatha... despite the rumours."
Lady Agatha:
"Like? Rumours?"
Emma:
"Oh, 'like' in a completely platonic manner that is, not like that... and well, don't mind me about the rumours mention."
(I don't know the Lord's relationship to Emma, so I used a last name.)FailedSanity wrote:Lord Cyrus:
”A slender man looks much like a woman, and rapists don't necessarily care where they're putting it.”
Emma:
”What?”
Lord Cyrus:
”Men will rape men, too, Miss Weal.”
Ah I see D: I had intended to apply it as a formal reference but I will change that as you have recommended.Firstly, your use of the word "homosexual" is jarring and a bit off-putting. While, technically, it means what you want it to, it's a very clinical word that is very rarely used with a straight face in casual conversation. You would be better off alluding to it, or using the word "gay" or "lesbian" or using time period specific slang instead.
That was definitely not the intention so I sincerely apologise.Next, your first use of "homosexual" leaves a bad taste in my mouth simply because of the implication that gay sex is rape sex. Homosexuality is romantic and sexual attraction towards someone of the same gender. Rape is an exercise of power over someone weaker. It may not have been your intent to equate the two, but the way it's worded makes it sound like such.
This is a bit..too much imagery for my liking >.<;; But I understand the direction you are going for and will make further adjustments.Lord Cyrus:
”A slender man looks much like a woman, and rapists don't necessarily care where they're putting it.”
Lord Cyrus:
”Men will rape men, too, Miss Weal.”
Oh I love that word... 'platonic'. Thank you for this! These will definitely be the lines I will incorporate with your permission. :3Emma:
"Oh, 'like' in a completely platonic manner that is, not like that... and well, don't mind me about the rumours mention."
Wish you luck with the game! 
Thanks for the support!Mimi_Melody wrote:I really love the art, and the story seems interesting as well
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