logolepsy wrote:Your VNs are neat, and this is no exception, but they could do with being betaed or at least being spell checked, and this is no exception (I didn't make a complete list playing through, but two of the more common mistakes were simple misspellings, e.g. "aquaduct" instead of "aqueduct," and faulty parallelism). It makes all the difference between a good story and a great one.
Thanks for playing our game! I hope you found it enjoyable despite the misspellings! I'm the proofreader as the credits note, so any and all 'aquaducts' and faulty parallelism troubles would be my fault. I
totally missed the aquaduct-->aqueduct mix-up, I'm very sorry about that! As for the 'faulty parallelisms', I think I would need a specific citation so that I know what you are referring to: 'faulty parallelisms' is too broad to address. Was there any particular instance that bothered you?
One thing I really must disagree with you on is the VN seeming like it has gone completely unedited. This had multiple different versions made and was proofread and play-tested by both OokamiKasumi and I many (
many...) times, and it is
worlds away from what it was at ver. 0.1. This is also a free game, and was actually made(written, coded play-tested) in just under two weeks, by two people doing it in their spare time. You may need to be forgiving towards a few 'aquaducts'.
This being said, we always want to improve, so helpful constructive criticism is very much appreciated. Any more typos you want to bring up? Send 'em to me.
Thanks again for playing!
Now, I'm off to bed to have bad dreams about ancient misspelled Roman plumbing...