General plot advice and input

[Avalanche]

Hello there. I'm new, pleased to meet you, this place looks great.

Anyway.

I'm looking for opinions, input, helpful guidance and harsh critiques. I'm not asking for project help in terms of development such as coding, art, etc, at this stage, but if you do wish to put your name down to help out later I would appreciate it. However, that is not my current goal.

General synopsis is here: (250 words)
http://pastebin.com/FhPLGc1M

Main character bio: (200 words)
http://pastebin.com/pcEJb379

Major character bios: (2000 words)
http://pastebin.com/DNTCiesZ

Minor character bios: (1000 words)
http://pastebin.com/7drag152

Please feel free to rummage through the links and give some tips, opinions, ask questions, etc.

[DNAniel213]

The plot is really interesting. No one can really do much critics right now, given that you've only given the synopsis and the character bios(which I think are great too.) Rather, asking for "General plot advice and input" is too blunt for pinpoint critics. Wait..

Here's a post from SelLi. It should give you some ideas for your growing plot.

http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 47&t=26881

Oh, and if you're looking for a small writing circle(This isn't an excuse for having very few members=_=) you can join ours.
It's on google drive, and our numbers are still growing.

[Avalanche]

Thanks for the reply. I know that what I posted in the links isn't very much to critique right now, but I felt that if I threw up what I had right now, I'd get more input than if I'd posted 10,000 words with twenty bios, hoping people would read them.

This way, I can add to the thread piece by piece, instead of dumping it all in a wall of text.
I'm hoping to start writing something today, or sometime soon.

I'd be very interested in joining your writing circle, or at least having a look at it.

[DNAniel213]

Pm me your google adress x) I'll add you to our google drive writing circle