Rite - Chapter1 GAME DEMO [Adventure][Fantasy][Action]

[mizuka]

Hi guys,
This is my first visual novel game, Rite - Chapter 1( I planned it to be an episodic game)
Here is the download link for the demo: link
If you want to give a feedback, here is the discussion topic: http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 43&t=28725
I hope you enjoy the game. If there are any errors with the link, please tell me.

[piichimi]

I'll check this out when I get home ^-^
looks cool

[mizuka]

I'll check this out when I get home ^-^
looks cool

Sure, looking forward to here your feedback

[michan]

Hi, michan here (again)!
Played the demo! So far it looks nice (though still incomplete). The sprites look good and the CGs go well with the storytelling. The interface is user-friendly, too. Exploration is a nice feature and I'd love to see how it would be implemented in the full game. It's also good that you added a notification regarding the qte feature (forewarned is forearmed, yes?).

As to what could be improved, I'd suggest getting a proofreader/beta reader for grammar/typos (wondering-->wandering, 'trying to be patience'-->patient, etc.) and to mitigate the redundancy in the text, such as:

'grant your wishes' and 'makes them come true' --> choose one of these phrases as they're pretty much the same

'they're not familiar with the place' and 'a country that they've never been before' --> Maybe just write it as 'It was a strange place; nothing looked familiar.'

Also, plotwise, is there any reason for

Yuyuko and Silver NOT to call the police or send Dan to a clinic or hospital instead of taking care of him at the inn?

I just find it curious, but if there's a twist... then <3

Would also like to hear more music in later releases of the game!

[mizuka]

@michan:
Thank you so much for trying out the game! I really appreciate it!
Yes, I would definitely need a proofreader and I will make some changes with the writing in game when the full game is released
I haven't decided whether i should hire a music composer or use the free resources. So far, the music is still a big problem to me.

Also, plotwise, is there any reason for

Yuyuko and Silver NOT to call the police or send Dan to a clinic or hospital instead of taking care of him at the inn?

I just find it curious, but if there's a twist... then <3

I can't tell you that because that would be a spoiler (but you're on the right track). I'm really glad that you notice that part.

[michan]

I can't tell you that because that would be a spoiler (but you're on the right track). I'm really glad that you notice that part.

I knew it! Now I REALLY wanna play the full game!

Re the music, I'm sure there are plenty of cool tracks to be had (the Creative Commons thread on this board is a godsend ). And the great Kevin MacLeod's http://incompetech.com/!

More power to you, and best regards.

[mizuka]

@michan :
That's great. Thank you
I will try to release the full game asap

[philip]

Just played through the demo and found it very interesting. Will look forward to future updates (Hope they come SOON!)

philip