Hi everyone, I'm proud to announce a new project that has been underway for a while now; Vision of Aurora Borealis. It's a Short Romantic Kinetic Novel. The Demo has been released; see bottom of the post for DL links. Please download it and give it a try! Any feedback would be greatly appreciated!
Story A young photographer travels to Iceland in search of the Northern lights. There he meets a mysterious, hostile young girl who speaks about elves and curses. What is this curse? Who is she? Join them in an adventure on the barren lands filled with myths, nature, and love.
Thought I'd give some feedback - but take it with a grain of salt.
Very pretty background art. Sprites are well made in the anime style. Good looking GUI.
Story - Intro in the garden was okay. Any longer though would have been too long for me.
I'd recommend starting Chris's story with him alone on the icesheet waiting for the lights to appear. It's where the action starts so would be good to get there quickly. Describe the desolation and that there's no-one else around so we get the impression what he's doing is unusual. Then reveal the reason - he's trying to get a photo that will win him an award. I didn't feel the flashback dialogue with his sister was necessary. If you need to make the case that it was his sister's taunting that got him out there, you can probably cover that in just a couple of sentences (particularly if the sister doesn't appear in the VN later on).
Hope this helps.
Good luck with it. Congratulations on your successful greenlight and fundraiser.
