Alright, how to begin... °__°; (I'm new at this feedback giving thing, haha :'D)
Um, first of all: I'm impressed you managed to create something like this in such a short time too!
I guess I'll just answer your questions, that should cover most things I wanted to say anyway. ^__^
1) Thoughts on Ife or Manaem?
I liked them both! They were quite an unusual pair, which made them even more interesting.
In fact, I'd love to have a kind, enthusiastic (and adorkable) teacher like Manaem. He may have been a handful to handle for Ife, but they both managed to learn something on their journey - and it's sweet how they became something like friends in the end! (*´꒳`*)
It was very interesting to see their different opinions regarding the Calikohs too!
2) At what point of the story did you figure out what a Calikoh was?
Also from the very beginning. Like Reikun, I wasn't sure if there was more to the Calikohs than met the eye and wondered at one point if they would die or get injured if something happened to their Calikoh. But then Manaem started to explain why he hired Ife, and that he saw people with patched-up or probably stolen Calikohs, so that couldn't really be true. (^~^;)ゞ
This whole talk about life threads and what Calikohs represent even got me thinking a bit... about what my Calikoh would look like. I guess it'd be boringly clean, maybe a little bit frayed at most. I don't know if I like that. I should probably find my own Ife and go on an adventure too! (。>ω<)。
3) General comments/suggestions?
Hmm, let's see...
- I liked your choice of music! :3
- I didn't run into any problems. (Played it on Firefox!)
- The monster that wanted to munch on Ife and Manaem was... kinda adorable. (´∀`)♡ I'm sorry, I probably have strange taste. xD
It was a very enjoyable little tale! Good work! ^__^