Hi everyone!!
A while ago the demo of my fanmade game was released. A lot of people have played it so far but I haven't really received enough feedback, so I'm looking for anyone willing to test play it and provide me with feedback on a few things:
① Feedback on the writing? (Spelling or grammar mistakes, how well does the story flow, etc)
② Feedback on the music? (Does it set the mood, seem out of place, etc)
③ Feedback on the new artwork? (If you want to compare it to the beta you can check out the comments below)
④ Any other comments?
The demo is available to download for FREE (it may ask you to pay, just click 'no thanks, take me to the downloads') via itch.io here: https://red-baby.itch.io/free-arabian-nights-demo
Thanks everyone!!
If for any odd reason you want to try the beta version to compare how much it's changed, you can download that here:
https://mega.nz/#F!mttD2IiB!faN8Vhq1E6lMMBjLnVOojw
Free! Arabian Nights Demo
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① What is your opinion of the artwork?
Pretty neat! However, I do think the anatomy need some fixing.
② Did you come across any spelling or grammar mistakes?
Not any that were particularly memorable! I'm not the best person to rely on that either way, lol.
③ What do you think of the story thus far?
It's good! It's only the prologue so I don't have any in-depth review to write about it, but it's definitely got some interesting potential.
④ Any other comments?
I love FREE! and I'm so happy you're making this! ♥
Pretty neat! However, I do think the anatomy need some fixing.
② Did you come across any spelling or grammar mistakes?
Not any that were particularly memorable! I'm not the best person to rely on that either way, lol.
③ What do you think of the story thus far?
It's good! It's only the prologue so I don't have any in-depth review to write about it, but it's definitely got some interesting potential.
④ Any other comments?
I love FREE! and I'm so happy you're making this! ♥
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Re: Free! Arabian Nights Beta
sherberrie wrote:① What is your opinion of the artwork?
Pretty neat! However, I do think the anatomy need some fixing.
② Did you come across any spelling or grammar mistakes?
Not any that were particularly memorable! I'm not the best person to rely on that either way, lol.
③ What do you think of the story thus far?
It's good! It's only the prologue so I don't have any in-depth review to write about it, but it's definitely got some interesting potential.
④ Any other comments?
I love FREE! and I'm so happy you're making this! ♥
Thanks for the feedback =D
Do you mind telling me which characters need anatomical work and which aspects in particular? Thank you =D
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Re: Free! Arabian Nights Beta
No problem! However, I only worked on Gou's anatomy because I'm pretty confident on my skills on that. As for male anatomy... I might try later this week if I'm up for a challenge. But I think it's better to find a more experienced person to help you on that!
I didn't actually have to change anything drastically, but I'll explain anyways! I fixed her ears to make them go from the eyes to the top of her lip. She also seemed a little slouchy so I straightened her a bit and I fixed the positions of her shoulders/breasts as well.
I hope you found it helpful!
I didn't actually have to change anything drastically, but I'll explain anyways! I fixed her ears to make them go from the eyes to the top of her lip. She also seemed a little slouchy so I straightened her a bit and I fixed the positions of her shoulders/breasts as well.
I hope you found it helpful!
Re: Free! Arabian Nights Beta
① What is your opinion of the artwork?
As someone mentioned characters anatomy could always be improved, but I think that it would be easier to improve your backgrounds instead.
Adding even simple shadows would go a long way in my opinion, because rooms look rather flat at the moment. While learning and improving anatomy can be a never ending story.
② Did you come across any spelling or grammar mistakes?
I haven't noticed anything.
③ What do you think of the story thus far?
I don't think there is much of a story to talk about so far. At this point it could turn out great, or not =)
④ Any other comments?
Writting is most definitly not my field, so feel free to ignore this comment. But prolog felt to me a little like a debriefing by narrator and capitan. I think that you could try to provide information in a more interactive way, or just explain the situation at start rather then having narrator interupt in the middle of dialog. And overall I feel like narrator had a lot of irrelevant things to say (like desciption where everybody sat down). But again I'm not a writer, so don't take me too seriously here.
Sorry, I know this is not a whole lot, but I hope it's going to be helpfull in some way.
Good luck with your project!
As someone mentioned characters anatomy could always be improved, but I think that it would be easier to improve your backgrounds instead.
Adding even simple shadows would go a long way in my opinion, because rooms look rather flat at the moment. While learning and improving anatomy can be a never ending story.
② Did you come across any spelling or grammar mistakes?
I haven't noticed anything.
③ What do you think of the story thus far?
I don't think there is much of a story to talk about so far. At this point it could turn out great, or not =)
④ Any other comments?
Writting is most definitly not my field, so feel free to ignore this comment. But prolog felt to me a little like a debriefing by narrator and capitan. I think that you could try to provide information in a more interactive way, or just explain the situation at start rather then having narrator interupt in the middle of dialog. And overall I feel like narrator had a lot of irrelevant things to say (like desciption where everybody sat down). But again I'm not a writer, so don't take me too seriously here.
Sorry, I know this is not a whole lot, but I hope it's going to be helpfull in some way.
Good luck with your project!
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