Thanks so much for all the feedback! I have started on version 2 of the butler, taking on board all the comments.
I have adjusted his face as suggested, with smaller features and stronger shading. I didn't put any highlights in for now, but may come back to that once his clothes are fully finished. As for the hair, I think I'm happy with it as is, although like the skin, I might do a pass once the clothes are finished. (And thanks for the compliment, PastelWolf88! It means a lot, as I think hair is the one aspect of my art that I feel I've worked on the most over the years.)
Does it feel like the mouth needs shifting down more? And do I shift the nose with it?
Pardon the rough lines on his clothes, I tend to do a rough sketch and then correct as I go. (The hand especially

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Anyway, I look forward to sharing the final work!
Thanks again for giving your thoughts, puppetbomb, rito, Limabaen, and sas! It definitely helped me become "unstuck" and unsure how to bring the style closer to what you see in otome games. I knew something wasn't quite right but I couldn't put my finger on it!
