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#2 Post by LVUER »

As usual, your art is nice.

Do you want to make your story a drama or spice it with action (my favorite) or supernatural (like Key's VNs)?

How about if the MC thinks she has an amnesia and trying to recover her memory while the truth is the MC that has the amnesia (hence the MC doesn't recognize her).

The girl is the boy's ex-GF and the MC has done something terrible to her like having an sexual intercourse with her and dump her (actually he lost her memory due to a mysterious incident the following day and the girl didn't know).

So the boy must discover the truth while trying to get the girl's heart back ^_^

Things get worse since the girl has indirect connection to the incident (like the boy is actually kidnapped for an experiment and the girl is from the rival faction, so in the end, the boy must chose to fight the girl, join the girl, fight them all, etc... )

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So, she's not usually in class, but you run into her around the school, and she always seems to be busy?

Possibility 1 - "Isolation Student"

For some reason, this girl is not supposed to be taught in the same room as the ordinary students. Perhaps she has done something terribly scandalous (pregnancy! stealing!) and is now considered a bad influence. Perhaps she has special educational needs (she could be hearing-impaired) and is usually taught in special private sessions. Perhaps she has HIV and the school administrators are scared of letting her mingle with the other students. In any case, you have someone who is a student and is trying to get the same education you are but isn't supposed to be hanging around with you.

Possibility 2 - "Undercover Student"

She's not a student at all, she's a young-looking undercover police officer (21 Jump Street! I *loved* that show.) investigating a crime. The most obvious possibility is that she's looking for a drug dealer or a gang of petty thieves. She ignores the player character at first because you don't seem like the type to be involved in the crime.

Possibility 3 - "Honor Student"

She's busy. Really really busy. She's involved in some huge important project and it's taking up all of her time, and because it's prestigious for the school, she's sometimes even allowed to cut class to go and work on it. In my own school I was editor of the literary magazine senior year, and could get away with missing certain amounts of class because I had work to do. Yearbooks would have the same deal. Or it could be a fancy science project, or something else she's doing to impress the admissions department of a university...

Possibility 4 - "Paranoid Student"

Because of some incident in the past (a teacher found out about something and is blackmailing a friend of hers) this girl believes that the school has secret surveillance systems wired up in it. She's searching for hidden cameras and microphones. But because she thinks she's being watched, she doesn't want to make it obvious what she's doing. She hopes to be able to get the school in legal trouble if she can find enough evidence.

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#4 Post by LVUER »

The MC always bump into her time to time when least expected? Then actually, the girl is stalking the boy (the girl is a stalker that want to rape the boy, kidding) ^_^

May be she likes him, may be she want to kill him (but hesitates to do so), or may be she just curious about him since she can't get him out of her mind?

She has so much pride (or extremely shy) that she can't get close to the MC more than 5 meters.

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#5 Post by Mikan »

By bumping into the main character when least expected, I meant that she's wandering around alone because she doesn't know where that something is, or if its a faculty or a student, she doesn't know where their classroom is.

Hmm... I'm getting an idea... I think I'll have her have an older sister who disappeared or died while attending this school before her, so now she's looking for clues as to what happened.

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#6 Post by LVUER »

Mikan wrote:By bumping into the main character when least expected, I meant that she's wandering around alone because she doesn't know where that something is, or if its a faculty or a student, she doesn't know where their classroom is.

Hmm... I'm getting an idea... I think I'll have her have an older sister who disappeared or died while attending this school before her, so now she's looking for clues as to what happened.
Then how about she doesn't know where the classroom is (despite she has attend the school for a very long time) because she doesn't see what we all normal people see. What she is is the other side of our plane and she still can't control her power yet ^_^

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#7 Post by Mikan »

I was hoping for something a bit more realistic and plausible..
My game isn't going to have fantastic elements.

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#8 Post by zephiel »

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#9 Post by Cazel- »

Well, if you have solidified your idea, great, if not here's an idea related to the one you mentioned (the sister dying/disappearing): her sister (or some other close relative) is a teacher at the school, and the girl is trying to investigate a nasty rumor that is going around about her sister. And because she is so preoccupied with tracking down the source of the rumors, she is not only slightly distrustful but assumes that everyone else is equally aware of the rumors and will look down on her because of them.

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#10 Post by LVUER »

She is not student at that school. She only wears the same uniform to infiltrate the school since she wants to uncover the disappearance (everybody thinks she runs away from home because of the bullying) or mysterious death (but no body know that fact yet except for the murder so this girl's life is in danger) of her sister. She really resembles her sister (actually you could make her as twin sister, big sister, cousin, or even mother) so the MC (and everybody else) mistakes her for her sister. The real girl (the one that missing/dead) is a loner, anti-socialist, has serious attendance problem, and else that makes the girl infiltration successful.

It's not strange that she always bump into MC since she always wandering around the school (and the MC also wanders around the school since we as the player told him so ^_^ ). She doesn't know where is where since this is not her school. She didn't attend the class since she can't (she's lost and busy).

She acts annoyed when the MC talks to her since she doesn't want her cover blown up. She never talks to anybody and annoyed by everyone (not only the MC) because of that reason.

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I'll try and hide my identity for now...

Hmm... OK, how about this...

Let's say the MC is your typical high school loser whose parents mysteriuosly vanished living alone on cash which mysteriously appears out of nowhere on a monthly basis...

Umm... too common?... well... err... OK... he's also the timid type... and is not popular with girls and was bullied on a regular basis... err... still stereotypical... well...

F**K THE MC... lets get to the main story...

MC, being bullied regularly always takes his lunch on the rooftop of the tallest building in the School... as always, he's alone... most of the time anyway...

Until one day, there was this... beautiful Girl appeared out of nowhere asked if she could join you...

Here are your choices...
Nod to show your approval because still enough space left... Dur Hur... it's the FRI**IN school building rooftop.

Nod to show your approval because for once, the MC will gain some bragging rights by having lunch side by side with a beautiful girl...
... now don't get your hopes up... she just asked if she could join you...eating side by side without paying attention to each other... either way, you'll end up jumping on the same label... (Har HAr Har!)

Fast forward Six Months later... the same day to day pattern still haven't changed eating lunch side-by-side without saying a word (Shesh!... what a loser!) but this time the MC finally accumulated enough balls to ask a question, let alone speak to her...

Here are your choices...
1 - Can I go on a date with you?
2 - Will you Marry Me?
3 - Say, can I borrow your Spoon?
4 - Why do Man have Nipples?
5 - Can you do a Barrel Roll?
6 - Spoiler Alert!
Will Pytom approve if I insert some H-Scene on Moonlight Walks (Specifically the part where the MC will ask to to Marry Mary... what?... and after the kissing scene, the MC whithout warning grabbed Mary's Breast and...

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label h_scene_at_beach:
    scene cg_hscene01 with dissolve
    mary "Wha!... What are you doing!"
    main "What newlyweds typically do... 
    main "you know, what comes after wedding... SEX! err... I mean Honeymoon..."
    mary "But... it's... too... I'm just... not... quite ready yet..."
    main "Don't you love me?"
    main "I do but..."
    scene cg_hscene02 with disslove
Suddenly, Mary decided to remove her clothes (Oh... just thinking of it gives me the Boner). Slowly, until all that is left to see are her pale white skin shinning under the Moonlight while her face all blushing red...

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    mary "I'm all yours..."
Without realizing, my hands (which is MC's) are moving on it's own... undressing myself as if... (Nah... Insert Cheesy Line here)

Then, I reached for my pocket and chewed a Doublemint Gum (to keep my breath fresh) and started really slowly... first with small but passionate kisses to licking her neck and slowly nibbling her ears while whispering more cheezy lines ala Barry White...

Then, I gently lowered her back to the ground and came to be on top of her. What needed to be said could be seen in our eye's.

I carefully and slowly entered her... which made her blush harder... the strange feeling of my body pressing against her and the warmth I felt inside of her in contrast with the surrounding (roughly 16 Degree Celcius... chilly) produced the greatest sensation I have ever felt...

To make thins short... I came... end of story...
Now, if you think the choices are quite hard... hear this...

This will be a timed choice (meaning: you'll be given a time limit to answer... let's see 0.20 seconds shall be enough)

If you did somehow managed to choose anything (good luck!... you only got 0.20 seconds)... some unidentified flying object will hit you, killing you on the spot... instant bad end (dur hur hur)

Otherwise, she'll say...

"This may be the last time I'm gonna see you..."
"can I, ask your name? (My GOD!... after six months)"
"(INSERT YOUR NAME HERE)"
"(Daily Routine)"

But this time, she looked straight into your eyes... with a sad look... not even saying a word she turn 180 degrees and walks away... never to see her again... (unless you do something about it... right?)

Using the money accumulated from a Piggy Bank (Where it came from?... I dunno) you hired a private detective who looked like a cat complete with cat ears and is nibbling on a pencil to find out what exactly is going on...

5 hours have passed...

The private detective came back still nibbling on a pencil with a 400 page report complete with interactive DVD and a copy of "Magical Boutique" burned on another CD thrown in as a Bonus since you're client number 100...

From the report, you learned that the Girl... whose real name is ******* * *********** who lives next door has been sold... OK, thats page 123... let's go back to page 001 shall we...

Her Father was a compulsive Gambler and Blah Blah Blah... loose a lot, burrows money, can't pay... more Blah Blah Blah and so forth... flip to page 040... sold car, sold house, leaves family, wife commited suicide leaving ******* * *********** to settle everything...

In the interactive DVD... you learned that ******* * *********** was sold to some Long Haired Guy with a Mustache who was a former Graphic Artist turned Printer and Bulk Ink Importer from China.

But, it is also included in the report that this "Long Haired Guy" loves to Gamble "A LOT" and is usually found on Casino Filipino along Pedro Gil near Roxas Blvd... Just a walking distance from Robinson's Place Manila... and he's a lousy Poker Player...

You decided to Save her... Your motivation?
Hmm... because she's beautiful?... YEAH! THATS IT!... WORKS EVERYTIME!

You decided to confront this... "Long Haired Guy" and challanged him to a Poker Duel with ******* * *********** being the prize... The Long Haired Guy laughed and said...

You're still 10 years too young Mah Boy! Come back if you gained enough experience...

Persistent... the MC insist on having a Poker Duel... and he lost everything... including his underwear...

Then the long Haired Guy stood up, with a sinister look in his eyes and said... "I admire your umm... persistance but that's not enough to beat me Mah Boy!... excuse me while I go and play with my umm... toy. (yeah I know, it's ******* * ***********)

Now here's the FUN part...

You (MC) will have 2 years and $1000

Your Goal is to accumulate as many cash (by Gambling... specifically POKER) during that time and enough reputation for me err... I mean... for The Long Haired Guy to notice you...

After 2 years if the conditions were...
Money below $1000 and reputation poor
You will go into hiding and be chased by loan sharks and become an-hero.

Money below $1000 but reputation good
You will become the spokesperson for "Kilusang Mayo Uno"

Money above $1000 but below $1,000,000 and reputation poor
You will become a corrupt politician with his very own private army... YEAH!

Money above $1000 but below $1,000,000 but reputation good
You'll become a politician, elected as a senator, then enter "showbiz" to gain fame then run for president only to be ousted by some "Bitch" two years later and spend some time in jail only to be pardoned a few years later.

Money above $1,000,000 but bad reputation
Poker Match with Long Haired Guy...
FU*K! Who needs her... You got the Money... you can have all the bitches you wanted... screw the objective...

Money above $1,000,000 but good reputation
Poker Match with Long Haired Guy...
(Nah... I woudn't want to spoil it now do we...)
Now, in order to implement this Monstrosity in Ren'py... here's my plan...
You'll use google and find any Phyton Based Poker Game out there... decompile it's code then copy and paste it into your ren'py script (A.K.A. Stealing)... ask, beg Pytom how to integrate it properly into Ren'py (We've all seen the Mini Tennis Game) and hopefully... after 5 to 6 years... you'll be able to finish it...
So?... What do you say?... BRILLIANT idea eh... :twisted:

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papillon wrote:Possibility 2 - "Undercover Student"

She's not a student at all, she's a young-looking undercover police officer (21 Jump Street! I *loved* that show.) investigating a crime. The most obvious possibility is that she's looking for a drug dealer or a gang of petty thieves. She ignores the player character at first because you don't seem like the type to be involved in the crime.
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#14 Post by exHominem »

Trained assassin! Trained assassin! Kills the player with a fork if he bugs her too much! Woo!
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