[WIP] Burnt Memories - Last update 13/06/10 -

[Bolt]

Hi there, I'm pretty new here

Trying to make a VN, with some mistery. Started today so... nothing much...

Genre

Mystery, Drama, Romance. BxG

Screenshot



Progress

CG Art: 5% (Not a lot of work here. Only take photos and put effects over them. Though I would like some CG art for the endings. :S but I'm not an artist XD)
Sprites: ??% (seeking an artist) --
Storyline Planning: 50% (Endings, Intro, Mayor events. Need Fillers)
Coding: Intro & characters intro.
Writing: 5% (Intro)
Music: 5%

Setting

A VN, with mistery, romance, and a lot of drama. And some plost twist I wont spoil here...
Japan (Yeah I wanted to use a miko, so It must be there XD, originally i was going to be in another place.), a little village in a forest.

Plot
Its about a boy around 17 years old, that lives in a village in the forest. He goes to a senior high school (currently last year), and has friends like any other guy. The plot revolves around the events that happen during the 2 weeks after his coming of age ceremony (18 birthday), and the truth around it.

Love interest/Routes

3 girls -- With Good Endings (One of them with a True Ending)
1 girl (another one) -- With a Normal Ending (Not sure right now)
And well, your normal Bad Endings.

Mode

NVL style the intro
ADV style almost all the game.

Help required

Sprites: 4 main girls, main guy.
Type:
normal (can be a smile, or serious look -- depends on the girl)
sad
disappointment
happy
shout
pout (special sprite depending on the girl)
blush
cry maybe

CG:
For endings.
I dont mind for others parts of the game
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Random stuff:

11/06/10
I hope I can upload the intro before 10 days... (yeah my bd is monday so... need to go to parties xD).
Not the best game summary, but its the start...

13/06/10: Intro and demo done. Lets see wht u think about it...

Only thing is, with the characters art Im using, Im not sure, if I can put drama...
Ok I was thinking, and considering the plot I would use (drama), this sprites feel really light to fulfill that. So I'll need older ones

Edited Plot

[Tsuki-chan]

Er...Your plot description isn't really a description of the plot.

[Bolt]

Yeah u are right...

I edited it.

Well, I dont know if the plot I put here, must be longer...

[alberte]

Are you planning on releasing a demo? or is the intro the demo..

But if I decide I like it I can make CG events for you.
etc..

[Bolt]

Well, the intro is only that, ill put it only so ppl can say wht they think.
I prefer to have some feedback, so after the introduction (dont expect much, is only a 6 pages intro to the game...), Ill try to make a demo. Im pretty new with this, so I dont think Ill be fast...

[Headache]

Do your best! I wish you good luck in your game.

[Bolt]

Do your best! I wish you good luck in your game.

Thx for the encouragement ...

I'll try...

Edit: I dont know If I can host the game here in lemmasoft forums... (I looked at the rules, but there is nothing...) So if only we can attach complete games, Ill put a link to a mirror...

[shahab96]

Actually I think its fine if you attach the demo. AS long as you label it as "Demo".
BTW I like your sprites....they're like.....strange chibis.

[shahab96]

Ok. well I played the intro (or the demo if that was it). I'd have to say:-
HOLY *******
IS THIS SERIOUSLY YOUR FIRST TIME!?!?!?!?
or something similar to that.

[Bolt]

@sha96 Yeah, I started learning Renpy this friday ...

The programming was done yesterday (A lot of problems ofuscating xD... I renamed 4 times all the images and music, till finally worked xD)
And today I had to change the bg music for the main menu and normal menu, because the engine is not playing it (dunno why, it worked before...)

Now, I'll sit down, to write more...

Edit: I know about that. But for now is wht I have (I used a generator, and all the characters looked chibi xD)
I might look for an artist because my characters are 16 years old, but here they look like 13 XD

Anyway... any Suggestions to improvement are welcomed...

Thx for the comments

[alberte]

Wow, amazing
For your title background.. In the front, the ashes it should be blured in the front so the leaf will stand out more..

Your choice of music I really like.. Your coding is so much better then mine.. I fail so hard OTL.

But yeah.. looking forwaard to see mooar..

[Bolt]

@alberte: Don't worry, I fail at art and graphics ...

I just vecotrized the photos...

about the blur, something like this?? or more?
(Im getting a crash course in photo edition xD)

[ForgottenVision]

You didn't happen to get your inspiration from Higurashi did you? I kinda get that sort of feel from it

Your coding is brilliant for someone who has just started!

It's very good so far, though. I suggest you keep an eye out for typos & misspellings since I remember noticing one or two when I read through it the other day (forgot to post straight after). Those can easily be removed at the end, though, by running the script through word and having a tester to read over it once it's finished. You've no idea how many little mistakes slipped by for my first VN that my tester found

[Bolt]

@Forgotten:

Yeah, I found them playing the 10th time, but I was lazy to edit the script.

Higurashi? Well, I know it, but I never read it, nor watched the anime, so I dont have any influence from it
I recieved influece from tsukihime though (the idea of telling different stories if I went for different paths)

[alberte]

I wonder-ForgottenVision.. are you talking about the visual novels or the anime?

And what kind of themes does this VN have?
^ ^
=w= _ccc