Aaaaaaaaarrrrrrrrgggggggggggghhhhhhhhhhh long post DDDDDDD: Bear with me on this.
Alright, voting on Xavier's face
(hurr hurr, it sounds ridiculous when I say it like that derpa derp) is now officially closed. 3 votes plus 4 from the team says yes to goatee, while 1 said no goatee. Majority vote wins, so Xavier's final design gets facial hair. Whee~
(Not really) Art update: Ryurieri is working on Santos and Aaron in no particular order, or so she says. I haven't gotten any word back from her about her progress, so I'm not sure when the last bishies will come
Coding update: Curry has an information/profile screen up and running that can have its contents changed at my ease. As Elise gets to know each person individually, the descriptions will change depending on what she knows and thinks of them. Also featured on the screen is a picture of the selected character and his/her likes, dislikes, basic information (date of birth, blood type, etc.), and current thoughts. Telepathy? Hells yeah
A character's thoughts might give you some insight into what they're going through or the kind of choices you should make when interacting with them.
Writing update: I headdesk so much because I can't seem to satisfy my inner-critic with what I keep typing up
and Funnyguts will shoot me if I keep bothering her. I keep revising the first day when everyone explodes over the terrible news, but I'm not sure if the pacing in one section is too quick or too slow. So... free cookies to you if you can get through this ginormous textblock of doom and give some feedback! *evil crackling in the distance*
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re"So what's happening here?"
hide santos normal
show terry normal at left with dissolve
t"This bakery is shutting down soon, that's all."
show renee surprised
re"What?!"
"Oh my god, why does Terry think that it's a good idea to tell everyone about this?"
re"I thought that Elise was going to take over one day!"
t"My thoughts exactly. But her father thinks contrary to that."
re"That's so unfair!"
$ express = "sad"
e"Well, what can I do?"
show aaron confused
a"I uh... don't really get what's going on here, but I guess you could start by not letting it happen."
dad"Elise, what's with all the noise out there?"
hide aaron confused
hide renee surprised
hide terry normal
show dad normal with dissolve
"Emerging from the kitchen is Dad with his reading glasses on and a pen in his hand. Looks like he was signing papers instead of baking stuff."
$ express = "normal"
e"Oh, um... It's just-{nw}"
show santos angry at left with dissolve
s"Some concerned customers that don't want your business to shut down."
show santos normal
"Dad's angry eyes find mine and I look away sheepishly."
dad"You told them?"
show terry normal at right with dissolve
t"Indirectly, yes. She told me, then I told them."
hide santos normal
show renee normal at left with dissolve
re"Mr. Greene, I don't think that you should do such a cruel thing to your daughter. You {i}do{/i} know how much she was looking forward to running it one day, don't you?"
"Dad lets out an exhausted sigh and turns toward the way he came."
dad"If any of you have anything to say against my decision, then we can discuss it in the kitchen."
hide dad normal
hide terry normal
show santos normal at center with dissolve
show aaron normal at right with dissolve
"With that said, he walks away. It's not even a split second later when Renee, Aaron and Santos exchange glances, shrug, and follow my dad into the kitchen."
hide renee normal
hide santos normal
hide aaron normal
And you will not get a cookie if you say "too long; didn't read." Any comments on my style would be nice too.
BTW, this is not really related to this WIP, but you all should check out Funnyguts'
Madoka Magica fangame. She's building up the RPG system from scratch, and beta-testers to stamp out any errors in the coding would be greatly appreciated. She puts up a demo update every Monday, so go on over there and help test out the system.
The cookie not the story, I mean the story is yummy too-wait did I just describe you story as yummy? Nevermind, anyways I really like the plot, I will continue to stalk it. 
