Imitation Heart (GxB Horror/Fantasy/Mystery VN)

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Imitation Heart (GxB Horror/Fantasy/Mystery VN)

#1 Post by Scarlet-Kokoro » Wed Nov 02, 2011 10:52 pm

Story:
The story follows a girl named Ayaka Fuji, an 16 year old transfer student from Nigata, Japan attending a boarding school, called Lux Hall, in the fictional city of Lux in England. A year ago Ayaka was dying of a weak heart, however, she made a deal with a kitsune demon in order to keep her heart beating. The kitsune's name was Avalon, apparently she named herself such because she claims to have been around since the time of King Arthur. In exchange for keeping Ayaka healthy Avalon was allowed to possess her body, giving her physical form in this world. Ayaka agrees to these conditions because she wants to find her biological sister. Since Ayaka was adopted she has never met her sister and now, with a new heart, she has her chance. With some research Ayaka discovers that her sister is under the new name of Ellen Postletwhate attending school at Lux Hall, thus, she applies to transfer there and is accepted as an international student.

Everything seems to be going fine until a girl is murdered on campus. The police had no leads but Avalon tells Ayako that the girl was murdered by another demon, drawn to the school by Avalon's power. Apparently, the demon is residing in one of the four boys Ayaka had contact with during the day. Now, Ayaka has to find and destroy the demon before it can kill her. Though it is a mystery game there are also opportunities to date and interact with 4 obtainable boys as well as other characters, in order to discover which one of the boys is the demon. Each boy will have a good and bad ending.

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Ayaka Fuji: Age: 16, the protagonist/heroine of the story. She has medium length brown hair, with the bangs on the right side swept over and held back by a clip. The clip is a simple bar-clip and is pink. Ayaka’s eyes are also a light pink in color. Ayaka is smart, but mostly only in books, street wise she's pretty clueless and has no sense of direction. Hence, she always ends up bumping into people, or getting turned around when walking.

Avalon: in her fox form Avalon is shown to be a purple fox with bright red eyes; she is also see through in this form, since she can’t hold physical form in this world. As a fox she has three tails, not yet reaching her desired nine-tail status. In this game it is revealed that she gains a new tail every time she possesses a person, but always seeks out someone who deserves to continue to live, which is why she has only done it three times. In her human form Avalon looks like Ayaka but her eyes are red instead of pink.
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Eric Moori: Age:18 Rebellious and sharp tongued, many students are scared of him because his mother is the Headmaster, he's a bookworm. His favorite books are occult and horror stories, sometimes people say that he practices magic.
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Lucas Sykes: Age:16 He never says anything, not even when teachers ask him questions in class. But, he was the first person to discover the body of the murdered girl. The object of bullying in the school he seeks refuge in the back garden, where he feeds the birds.
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Derek Connar: Age:17 Big-nerd-on-campus, large glasses included, Derek is clumsy and shy but a sweetheart. A whiz with computers he also has an affinity for languages: he speaks five of them as though he were fluent. However, there are times when Derek seems to become a different person, apparently he suffers from what he calls 'rage blackouts'.
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Makoto Kurama: Age:16 Another exchange student from Japan, he came to the school three days before the murder. Makoto loves to solve puzzles and is actually placed in the senior class, even though he is only sixteen. Makoto is very serious and doesn't understand sarcasm often.

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I know the plot is similar to Millennium Snow, however, there are quite a few differences...
As for the problem of culture in both Japan and England I have lived in both places... I hope that gives some condolences as to the idea that I can pull this off. Plus, this is VN occurs in a fictional city...

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Script: 30%
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Sprites: 75% (?)
CGs: 0%
Word Count: 5,872 (WIP)
Writer: Scatlet-Kokoro
Sprite Artist: PockieHoshi
Event CG/Background Artist: jaypee_1
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#2 Post by Rewritten Ennui » Wed Nov 02, 2011 10:56 pm

That's definitely better. Now I understand why Ayaka would make that deal. Remember that the location and characters are the meat of a good story, so I just need to see what kind of bishies boys there are before I can decide if I would want to play a game like this.
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#3 Post by Sapphi » Wed Nov 02, 2011 10:58 pm

The plot sounds interesting. I like the mystery. (What if the murderer is Avalon herself and Ayako doesn't know? Ahhh!) But where do the obtainable boys come in? Is the point of the game to date them to see if they are demons or not?

Also, why does Ayako want to meet her sister so badly?
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#4 Post by Scarlet-Kokoro » Wed Nov 02, 2011 11:16 pm

I put some descriptions for the boys up. I hope this is all right for now... Since I don't have a tablet all of my pictures are hand-drawn, until I can scrape up enough money to order a tablet. Pictures for all the characters should be up by tomorrow...

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#5 Post by manga_otaku » Thu Nov 03, 2011 1:47 pm

Sapphi wrote:But where do the obtainable boys come in? Is the point of the game to date them to see if they are demons or not?
I quite like the idea of that - it would definitely give the boys a role in the game. Maybe the murderer demon is residing in their bodies and the boys don't know about it since the demon only comes out when they're asleep or unconscious...hmmmm x)
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#6 Post by Scarlet-Kokoro » Thu Nov 03, 2011 3:09 pm

Update:
Picture of Ayaka Fuji is finished! If you want to critique that I have a thread up in the Skills board. Things are going to be a little slow...I have to scan all of my pictures into the computer then re-color them in GIMP. Plot has been updated as well in order to explain the role of the boys.
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#7 Post by therealrose » Thu Nov 03, 2011 3:46 pm

Sounds pretty interesting, I haven't played a Mystery VN in awhile.

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#8 Post by Scarlet-Kokoro » Sat Nov 05, 2011 3:27 pm

therealrose wrote:Sounds pretty interesting, I haven't played a Mystery VN in awhile.
Yesh. I hope I can do the genere justice... Might look for players to analize the script later. :)
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#9 Post by Scarlet-Kokoro » Fri Nov 11, 2011 9:31 pm

I've posted hand-drawn pictures of Eric, Lucas and Derek! Please let me know what you all think! I might hand draw the VN since it would be much easier and faster due to the materials that I have. Though, I might not use copic markers and instead use colored pencil. Please let me know if you all are okay with hand, drawn characters or digitally drawn characters.

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#10 Post by Tag- » Fri Nov 11, 2011 10:06 pm

Personally, I don't mind traditional or digital art, as long as the entire game matches with the style/ That being said, there aren't many VNs that use traditional art, so best of luck for this :D

I like the sounds of this plot, it's quite intriguing~ So far, I like Eric best (multicoloured hair ftw~)
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#11 Post by Scarlet-Kokoro » Fri Nov 11, 2011 11:54 pm

Thanks for the feedback, I'm actually looking at different options for now. :) I shall do my best! :D
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#12 Post by jaypee_1 » Sat Nov 12, 2011 4:59 am

I recieved the pm and your plot was it still on progress? as you know im only looking for a complete one so i decline also was this a linear story or you intend to make different routes? liking the story so far.

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#13 Post by Scarlet-Kokoro » Sat Nov 12, 2011 3:07 pm

The plots the way it is going to stay, however the whole script isn't complete. Sent you a PM on it.
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#14 Post by jaypee_1 » Tue Nov 15, 2011 4:51 pm

Scarlet-Kokoro wrote:The plots the way it is going to stay, however the whole script isn't complete. Sent you a PM on it.
ok looking forward to see the finish plot, since I am working on your characters I also going to post it here for your work progress.

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#15 Post by Scarlet-Kokoro » Wed Nov 16, 2011 3:10 pm

Pictures of the boys are up!!!
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