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Charmed [Science/Otome] [GxB] [GxG]

#1 Post by Egressus » Mon Jun 25, 2012 9:09 am

Charmed
Also called Egress's misguided attempts at combining Otome with Science.
Pushing to have a demo by 15th of July.

You are a Charm quark. You're decaying, Quark day is a month away, and you don't know who to ask! You haven't even bought cute clothes for the day.
But your best friend Up is egging you to go with Strange, and there's a really pretty Beauty as your school partner, and this Truth quark is willing to hear your problems of the day.
One month to do everything. Surely you can do it?

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Note from Egress: Forgive me for the cheesy plot (or the lack of plot, actually), O Life. I cannot even write romance, why.
THIS IS NOT A SERIOUS STORY. It's the teeth-rotting ones about cute girls cooing over cute clothes. Don't expect an ounce of seriousness here, there are no dead people.
(unlike my other ideas)
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CHIBIS are to be redone.

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Charm (Carol)
Please don't commit suicide.

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Strange (Sion)
Your childhood BFF who is your age. He once was sweet and caring, but his decay changed him into somebody you don't know anymore. He's quiet and seems to be sporting bruises often, but he's on the top of his class.

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Beauty (Bride)
Your assigned partner. You bond over clothes more often than you work on your assignment. She's really nice and understanding, too, but not the brightest light bulb.

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Truth (Thaddeus)
The guy sitting behind you. He's friendly and always lends you an ear. He also has a very active internet life, and doesn't mind helping you work on your homework.

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Up (Ubertha)
Your over-the-top buddy who never seems to conform to the norm of society. She's enthusiastic about everything but her name. She introduces herself as Uta. Down's girlfriend. They're inseparable, and are on the way of being one baryon.

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Down (Dorian)
An understanding best friend who is much calmer than Up. Sometimes he suffers depression spells, but they never last long. He reads a lot, and the only one who understands his jokes is Strange.

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Features:
> Science!
> More science! (No, really.)
> Choose what science you want to read! (Told you)
> 3 pursuable quarks.
> 2 outfits for weekend + 3 for Quark Day
> Homeworks!
> Old names
> 7 endings-- friendships, "romance", and "alone".
> The blood and guts of Egressus.

Progress:

Art: 3(?) % [Art to-do]
Scripting: ?? %
Programming: How should I know? I CANNOT PROGRAM sob

If you can program a clothing system (shop + invo if bought), help?

Stats: Day 1 (almost complete)
These screens contain a total of 2,286 words,
The game contains 3 menus.
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Re: Charmed [Science/Otome] [GxB] [GxG]

#2 Post by Auro-Cyanide » Mon Jun 25, 2012 9:17 am

OMG, SCIENCE!

Ahem, but seriously, it's a cute idea, especially if the science bit is really worked in. OMG, I will fangirl all over this... I'm a fan of science if you haven't noticed *points at user name* I'm the girl who cracked up in chemistry class because the explanation of atoms bonding made them sound human, so I love this idea so much. So much.

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#3 Post by Crocosquirrel » Mon Jun 25, 2012 9:29 am

I'll be interested to see how the science comes together. The use of the depreciated names Truth and Beauty rather than the current Top and Bottom is amusing as well.
I'm going to get off my soap-box now, and let you get back to your day.

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#4 Post by Egressus » Mon Jun 25, 2012 10:10 am

@Auro; Whee!!! FOR SCIENCE I will do anything... except commit suicide, I think.

Science is The background of the world. Adolescence are explained in terms of decaying. No Mesons here, but I will focus on that in another vn. The school is named, ahem, Higgs Boson. I suck so much.

You'll have 3 topics to choose for your assignment:
> Astronomy and the quantum mechanics
> Theories of each quarks
> The fundamental forces
So yeah, plenty of that.

Science makes the world go round. Literally.

@DarkSpartan; I chose those names because Top and Bottom makes them sound more like a pair and I don't want people to expect them to get together. And I couldn't think up of personalities with Top and Bottom.
Well, I hope it'll come together nicely. Don't want to give The Awesomest physics a bad light.
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#5 Post by sapiboonggames » Mon Jun 25, 2012 10:26 am

You finally post here! :D
How long is the story going to be? Estimated word counts?
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#6 Post by Egressus » Mon Jun 25, 2012 10:32 am

I can't really give an estimated word count since I'm making things up as I go (LOL Bad practice, I know). But there's 31 days and 12 Events as well as 3 homework topics. I'm thinking towards 20k+.
There will be some drama, too, especially if you divide your attention equally between two quarks. And also Charm's decaying thing. Yeah, definitely somewhere around 20k.
But it's also less plot-heavy than Things Not Seen.
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#7 Post by sapiboonggames » Mon Jun 25, 2012 11:05 am

I think 20k is a good start. I still don't understand many things about the quarks, though (sorry that i'm so slow D:)
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#8 Post by Egressus » Mon Jun 25, 2012 11:17 am

That's why I'm making this a cutesy romance game-- I don't want people tripping over their feet to understand the science behind it. Your homework in-game will inform you of that. I don't expect you to know, actually. Text books tells us that atoms are the smallest particle, after all.
Slow and steady. Science is supposed to be fun.

Yeah, 20k is short, compared to the 50k+ that is Things Not Seen. Never adapt stories... until you beat the unnecessary details.

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4 of Charm's outfits are done, but I'm not sure I want to post them now.. :d
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#9 Post by sapiboonggames » Mon Jun 25, 2012 11:37 am

Egressus wrote:That's why I'm making this a cutesy romance game-- I don't want people tripping over their feet to understand the science behind it. Your homework in-game will inform you of that. I don't expect you to know, actually. Text books tells us that atoms are the smallest particle, after all.
Slow and steady. Science is supposed to be fun.

Yeah, 20k is short, compared to the 50k+ that is Things Not Seen. Never adapt stories... until you beat the unnecessary details.
Is Things not seen your novel? Wow, I could never write a novel (even writing a VN is tiring me out!)
I'm a science student but I don't know about quarks (shamed >_>) but I do know that atoms are the smallest particle! (well, we learn this even in junior high so >__>)
Anyway, this VN is a must play for me, I want to learn science while playing~
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#10 Post by Egressus » Mon Jun 25, 2012 11:41 am

It's a NaNoWriMo novel, so the quality is sh*t. But I like it because it was my connection to my characters.

LOL They don't even teach you about Schroedinger's cat until you're in college, much less particle physics. Don't worry about those-- you might be a science student, but I'm a physics nerd. I squee at physics.

Okay, I succumb to the pressure of having something to post.
(I just noticed the less-than-neat colouring, and will fix it."
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#11 Post by sapiboonggames » Mon Jun 25, 2012 11:45 am

^ those are wonderful clothes you have there, they're so pretty! *squee*
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#12 Post by Egressus » Mon Jun 25, 2012 11:50 am

Certain outfits with certain characters will unlock bonus scene ;)
But I'm keeping my mouth shut with that.

Back to scripting! Or do I colour the stats screen? I think I'll save that for Wednesday.
I can't draw more without the script anyway.
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#13 Post by sapiboonggames » Mon Jun 25, 2012 12:05 pm

Egressus wrote:Certain outfits with certain characters will unlock bonus scene ;)
But I'm keeping my mouth shut with that.

Back to scripting! Or do I colour the stats screen? I think I'll save that for Wednesday.
I can't draw more without the script anyway.
I know that, my game is kinda like that too (well, for me it's 'go to certain places with certain outfits and get a scene' type?)
I think it's better to finish the script first or you may end up with unused graphics (it happened to me! :<)
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#14 Post by Egressus » Mon Jun 25, 2012 12:15 pm

I don't actually know how much expressions are needed. Which is bad.
The scene is more humorous than anything (I love Strange's-- it's the cutest. Ever.)

Headbanging due to shop function thingy.
I want the price to show when hovered, but I don't knnowww
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#15 Post by PyTom » Mon Jun 25, 2012 6:37 pm

This seems kind of fun to me, and the art has a lot of personality. It'll be interesting to see how well this works as a game.

For selfish reasons, I'm hoping that this tends more towards crossover-otome, then otome-otome. But that's really up to you to decide.
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