Khadrian's art progression thread (Critique/Comments)

[Khadrian]

I'm not sure if this is a good Idea, but I'm just gonna go with it. Here I will place art-related-image-things to document and hopefully speed up my progress as an artist. I suppose now's a good time for one of those picture things. Here's two images of the same character, drawn about 2 months from each other, and with some different designs (I'm not very creative so designing characters is difficult.) Now then....

[SundownKid]

Not bad, I think the biggest issue is that the hair is too small and the shading is a bit off (under the dress, no shading on the face). The perspective on the bottom sprites seems like the viewer is located lower than the character rather than on the same level - probably due to being able to see "under" the dress.

[Shad12ow]

I'm not a professional artist (I'm not even an artist, hahaha...) so maybe my comment is far from correct.
But I'll try anyway, hehehe...
First what I feel strange is the neck. For me it is a bit too long.
And maybe, uhm, I don't know. I can't really put my finger on it, but I feel that the whole face kind a flat.
Maybe just like Sundownkid said, the shading is a little bit off.
Well, that's my opinion, hope it help.

[Khadrian]

Okay, It's officially decided (by me of course) that hands solely exist to make artists cry *cries*. Anyways here's a new one keeping the shading in mind. I don't have a lot of practice with coloring because most of what I draw never gets past the sketch stage, either way I'm starting to understand how to shade hair (hopefully not too much) and decided to go with a softer shading for skin. Feet are left undone because... meh, I just forgot about them...

[Kaireen]

Would you mind if I made some redlines?

[Khadrian]

@Kaireen - Please feel free.

[Kaireen]

redline in attachment. It's not perfect, but few things before checking them.

1. I did not change general proportion of character since 'natural' proportion is not what you were aiming for obviously.
2. I did not draw hands/foots because it's more complicated and only thing I would suggested is to draw them more often and from real model.
3. Be careful and do not tilt head on your characters like that without drawing whole head beforehand. It's like a highway to egghead-land.

I turned her head a little, to more natural look, but I'm not sure if that was a pose you had in mind.

One things about shirt - although a lot of folds looks.. cool it's important to keep natural look of fabric. every fabric folds in unique way so observing is a key to success.

redlines

I hope it's helpful.

[Taleweaver]

Personal art threads belong into the Personal Art subforum. Moving this thread.

[Taleweaver]

Personal art threads belong into the Personal Art subforum. Moving this thread.

[Khadrian]

I didn't know such a subforum existed . Thank you very much for correcting my mistake.

also @Kaireen Thanks for the redline and tips, I'll do much better next time thanks to them I'm sure.

[Khadrian]

Okay, I've put all the help I've gotten so far into a new picture. I actually have gotten as far as flats and some shading, but I decided to post with just sketch and ink. I put a lot more time into the sketch this time, including fully drawing out the head (no egghead, yay!). As for the random sketches in the background, I couldn't quite get the angle right on her left leg so I was testing range of motion in front and profile views for reference. I'll definitely have to do some hand study soon though.

[Deji]

Uhm, I tried doing that pose you drew and found it really awkward :S
I sketched a couple more achievable and less uncomfortable similar poses. Hope it helps you (:

Disclaimer: I fail at drawing feet! >_<

[Khadrian]

Waaaa! sorry I haven't gotten a chance to draw a new image for this thread , but @Deji thank you very much for your response. I can definitely see where I went wrong. I was so focused on getting her left leg to look right at the angle that I didn't make sure it was at the right angle to begin with. And that made me want to extend the right leg unnaturally... and she's leaned back to far... and her hands... Oh so much to fix . I'll try to draw something new asap, but for now I need to focus on writing.

Ah, also, @Deji, Why you make her so cute?? /jealous Just your sketches are great, anything more is just too much awesome. Sigh, back to work...

[Khadrian]

Alright, so I figured I've been trying too hard to do things "right" lately that I thought I would try drawing something without trying, and simply let myself enjoy it while trying to find my own style. This is what I came up with. Well I think the hair turned out really well, and the rest of it is uh... acceptable for now.