When The Sea Lions cry! On [Progress] [Closed]

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When The Sea Lions cry! On [Progress] [Closed]

#1 Post by UmiLion » Thu Dec 27, 2012 10:26 pm

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Re: When The Sea Lions cry! On [Progress]

#2 Post by mirelle » Thu Dec 27, 2012 11:47 pm

It would be good for you to provide us more information, for example the overall plot, the characters, and how do you plan to make this VN "different" from the umineko one.
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Re: When The Sea Lions cry! On [Progress]

#3 Post by UmiLion » Fri Dec 28, 2012 1:00 am

By the way, the vn is made with Ren'py.

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#4 Post by mirelle » Fri Dec 28, 2012 1:57 am

it's already obvious from the default font and all

Also, please fix the spelling and grammar if you want to convince more readers to pitch in.

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#5 Post by UmiLion » Fri Dec 28, 2012 3:53 am

Yes, I just fixed it. Is the vn good? I mean by the layout and everything... Hehehe, I'm actually getting opinions, but thanks for the advice! I also want opinions if the story is ok.

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#6 Post by mirelle » Fri Dec 28, 2012 8:07 am

Ok opinion time. I don't really follow the umineko vn so I'll just comment on what I can.

First thing that catches my attention is that for a nvl-type game, your writing is very much like an adv game. (Adv- the small textbox type of visual novel)

And is this novel kinetic or does it have multiple ending with choices involved?
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#7 Post by UmiLion » Sat Dec 29, 2012 2:51 am

It's a visual novel, it has different endings and different episodes to! Also, I'm changing the text to! I mean, it's still going to be nvl-mode but some of the scripts would be updated :).

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