ERASER (Drama/Sci-fi) [PC][Android]

[tiya_nofurita]

I want you to erase my memories...

Hi there. After several months of work (and many inactive ones, cough) I have successfully exported ERASER on Android version (initially only on PC version) and publish it on Google Play. I need more people to test it though, because it runs very slowly on my Android device (probably because lack of RAM or storage) so I'd like to know if the same issues might happen to you as well.

Here's the link for Google Play (for Android version 2.2 and up). Don't worry, it's free and only 40 MB in size

But if you're into PC version (Windows, Mac or Linux), you're very welcome to give me some feedback too because lack of feedback I got from previous release. It's slightly outdated than the Android version but the idea and interface is basically the same

Download Link for PC-All (Windows, Mac, Linux)

Synopsis:

It's Summer 2010. I was given an assignment for my "final project" to watch over Violanda Margaritifera, an ordinary 16-years old high school girl, who was participated on the clinical trials of some kind of new substance on development. It is said that the substance has an effect on erasing some specific parts of someone's memories...Instead of having a standard procedures which require her to stay on the isolated facility during the treatment, she was given a freedom to lead a normal everyday life and attend school like she usually did. As the consequences, I have to watch her on her school and disguise my appearance as high-school student too. However, that girl is more troublesome than she looks...and many things is not going smoothly as I planned...

Characters

Left : your protagonist (Tito)
Right : main character (Vio)

another characters : Coming Soon

FEATURES
1. Game menu screen to monitor your progress
2. Hyperlink that brings you to the quick explanation about technical terms
3. Tips for more in-depth explanation about technical terms you encountered during the game

SCREENSHOT








DEMO VER 0.1

Code: Select all

Statistics:

The game contains 300 dialogue blocks, containing 4,320 words and 24,854
characters, for an average of 14.4 words and 83 characters per block.

The game contains 1 menus, 18 images, and 38 screens.

Approximately 15-20 minutes reading.
Notes :
1. Tentative main menu screen
2. The sprites currently only have one expression
3. The script has not been corrected by the proofreader

Please give me some feedback
1. What do you think of the story so far?
2. What do you think of game system overall?
3. What do you want me to improve on the future?
4. Any bugs/error encountered?

Thank you once again for your attention. Any constructive criticism would be appreciated

[tiya_nofurita]

Thank you for certain person who'd reviewed this VN on youtube so far there is no problem on PC version as I can see

[breadslam]

I don't have many visual novels or games on my cell (since it's a cheap-o, fell-off-the-back-of-a-truck model), so I'll give yours a fair shot.

Would you prefer feedback in the thread or via PM once I'm done?

[tiya_nofurita]

I don't have many visual novels or games on my cell (since it's a cheap-o, fell-off-the-back-of-a-truck model), so I'll give yours a fair shot.

Would you prefer feedback in the thread or via PM once I'm done?

Thanks! Feedback on this thread will be fine, since I want other people to read too

[tiya_nofurita]

Improved system on Android version (so you don't have to "kill" the task manually to quit but just tap "System" and choose "Quit" to end it on midgame)

Also, new key visual

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I really like the idea of the game and the layout of the game. It sounds like it'd definitely be a game worth playing. However, there's one thing that bothers me, and I know it may be a little late to work on this. The faces look a little odd. Other than that, the art is fine, it's just the faces. Though, many people will not play a VN when the art looks strange or bad (this does not go for all people or all visual novels though). Now, this part is not meant to be insulting at all, just being honest here, but if I were given the choice to play this VN or not, I probably wouldn't. The faces bother me quite a lot, and it's hard to imagine I'm the only one like this.

[tiya_nofurita]

I really like the idea of the game and the layout of the game. It sounds like it'd definitely be a game worth playing. However, there's one thing that bothers me, and I know it may be a little late to work on this. The faces look a little odd. Other than that, the art is fine, it's just the faces. Though, many people will not play a VN when the art looks strange or bad (this does not go for all people or all visual novels though). Now, this part is not meant to be insulting at all, just being honest here, but if I were given the choice to play this VN or not, I probably wouldn't. The faces bother me quite a lot, and it's hard to imagine I'm the only one like this.

Thank you for your honest opinion yeah it's looks like it's too late to change this (I already draw their sprites atm...and it's unlikely to re-draw them again. Then again because it's my style it's hard to change during short period of time eh.) however I'm quite curious with your definition of "strange". What really bothers you a lot? The face on the sprites or the illustration/CG? Any feedback would be appreciated don't worry I don't feel offended because of your statement. It depends on preference, I guess.

[tiya_nofurita]

Actually I already re-draw the sprites a while ago...does it looks different significantly...or not? Does it get any better or just the same as the previous one? (but it's unlikely I'll change their design after this)

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Yes, the new version is significantly better. It was mainly the shape of the faces that bothered me. My definition of "strange" would probably mean odd shapes, or other things that look out of place.
Though, now that I look at the newer sprites, I just realized the female character's breasts are slightly lower than they should be, or that's how it looks to me. It's not a huge issue though.

Well, other than that, good luck with your VN!

[tiya_nofurita]

Yes, the new version is significantly better. It was mainly the shape of the faces that bothered me. My definition of "strange" would probably mean odd shapes, or other things that look out of place.
Though, now that I look at the newer sprites, I just realized the female character's breasts are slightly lower than they should be, or that's how it looks to me. It's not a huge issue though.

Well, other than that, good luck with your VN!

Well, I should have realized that. Many people said the same thing about the breasts. Ahaha. Guess it can't be helped.
Thank you for the input!

[tiya_nofurita]

Version 0.2
1. Added new sprites and expressions.
2. Modified textbox, NVL box and backlog.
3. Added option "reset to default" into Configuration.

In general I want version 0.2 to be more "user-friendly" especially on Android user (I've received some input that the quick menu on textbox is too small on previous version and there wasn't any quick menu on NVL box) so what do you think?







You can download the latest version on Google Play

[tiya_nofurita]

Thanks for 1000+ download on Google Play!
Also it ranked 4th for keyword "visual novel"!
I'm planning to get the story done on this month (if I don't have to take remedial test...)

[octacon100]

Congrats on getting over 1000 downloads! The new GUI updates are looking great. I'll try the game out again!

[tiya_nofurita]

Congrats on getting over 1000 downloads! The new GUI updates are looking great. I'll try the game out again!

Thanks! The story is more or less the same, though. Only the GUI aspect was updated on Android version.
Also, I give you my review on your game on Google Play too

[Saltome]

If you would be so kind as to update the pc version, so I can test the current version of the game.
In any case I'll keep my overall opinion to myself.
But from what I can see you are really lacking in the writing department. There are tons of mistakes.
I really didn't expect so many, considering how polished the GUI is.