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Noire wrote:Looks interesting, I really like the drawing style

astrokeofmadness wrote:Premise- interesting, although could use more info- how will preventing the tragedy also cause her to learn things she shouldn't know?(Yeah I know you wrote it more like a hook then a outline, but still!)
Art- good, clean- would like a picture of Chris what with her being the main character and all.(Also you can't tell which side of the spectrum the weight struggle is without a picture- remember there is also a subset of people who have underweight problems and people who think they need to lose weight when they are completely healthy)

Estimated game length?
Might be a strange question, but can you include an ending that doesn't involve "obtaining" either girl?(that isn't just a Bad end scenario style) From the premise you didn't mention anything really about love, so it kinda might be interesting to explore a scenario where love doesn't bloom, but perhaps friendship just tightens.

Anyways, nice to see the project here

DarkSin wrote:This looks like it'll be very good. Any estimate on the finished game's length? Loving the simplicity of the colouring, it goes very well with the art style. Sometimes less is more. Especially if done right. And I'd also like to have an inkling of what the protagonist looks like Overall I find it very intriguing, the art is superb, and it looks like it'll be one those "deep dramas". Which is good

Seigetsu wrote:Does the premise seem interesting?
I don't find it particularly exciting but not boring either. I guess there isn't a particular hook for me yet? There is too little information at this point to tell. Compared to the "realistic nightmare" plot device, I'm actually more interested in the "struggling with her weight" premise. There aren't a lot of games dealing with this issue, so I find that it can be very interesting to investigate the theme of body image, and how external support/pressure affects the individual's outlook.

What do you think of the art?
I like the art. It's clean and the style is consistent.

Do you like the characters?
They're nice, but just from the descriptions, I don't think there is any particular trait about either Jade or Kelda that would make them stand out. I don't think this is a problem. I like playing VNs with characters that fall into existing categories too (my favourite is the "tsundere") - I just don't know if that's what you're aiming for, because Kelda gives me the "popular optimistic girl" feel, while Jade the "quiet, shy, animal-lover" type.

Any tips?
Not in particular, since I haven't made a VN before. I suppose it's better to start simple and work your way upwards to complexity? Perhaps finish a route with limited number of CGs, then add routes and CGs if you have time? I much prefer a finished project than a grand project that's never released.

I do have more questions for you, actually, if you don't mind.
How many CGs are you planning for this project?
Do you have an estimated timeline as to when a demo (if there would be one) would be released?
Would this be a free or commercial project?

Anyways, I think this is a great start. I'm really excited to see more GxG games in progress. Good luck!

Aratzne wrote:Does the premise seem interesting?
Yes! It sounds like a complex premise that could go many ways. There's lots of aspects you have here to deal with: The trauma/tragic accident, possibly something supernatural with Chris stopping the accident, Chris struggling with her own personal/physical identity, the friendships/relationships with the other girls, the other girls' own secrets... and so on. I think this is great, but it will take strong writing to pull it off well (while also making the characters realistic and relatable). I'm sure you have a grasp on what you want to do with the game - my advice is to pick the central theme/plot for the game and build from there. Make sure you're thinking about how to balance these plot threads as you're writing the routes.

What do you think of the art?
The sprites look really cute! They seem quite well done, and the character designs match the characters' personalities. I'm a fan of the sprites' simplicity as well; it draws attention to the characters' eyes (which look super bright and pretty).

Do you like the characters?
Yes, all three of them sound like they'll be fun to read about. It sounds to me like you're making the effort to make sure they're all realistic and different from one another, which should lead to a very interesting story!

Any tips?
Not really! The premise and art look appealing so far (and it's cool to see it as a GxG game). Like Seigetsu, I think it could be compelling to see more focus on Chris's struggles with her personal identity/weight issues (and of course whatever personal secrets you have in store with us for the other girls).

Razz wrote:Those sprites look incredible! Jade's eyes are so pretty.
I like the premise as well!