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I am looking for feedback on my alpha demo. We are going to have a custom GUI in a week but I want to vet the plot a bit and see where i can make improvements.
The Demo is roughly 10 minutes. It is like a novel.
http://www.indiedb.com/games/black-sand ... ha-version
1. How do you like the writing? What can be improved?
2. Is the plot interesting?
3. Did it function well via programming?
4. How was the music?
5. Whatever else you want to say.
Black Sands Alpha Prologue Demo is looking for criticism
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trooper6
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Re: Black Sands Alpha Prologue Demo is looking for criticism
This should be in the Demo and Beta Testing thread.
A Close Shave:
*Last Thing Done (Aug 17): Finished coding emotions and camera for 4/10 main labels.
*Currently Doing: Coding of emotions and camera for the labels--On 5/10
*First Next thing to do: Code in all CG and special animation stuff
*Next Next thing to do: Set up film animation
*Other Thing to Do: Do SFX and Score (maybe think about eye blinks?)
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*Last Thing Done (Aug 17): Finished coding emotions and camera for 4/10 main labels.
*Currently Doing: Coding of emotions and camera for the labels--On 5/10
*First Next thing to do: Code in all CG and special animation stuff
*Next Next thing to do: Set up film animation
*Other Thing to Do: Do SFX and Score (maybe think about eye blinks?)
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Re: Black Sands Alpha Prologue Demo is looking for criticism
Yup.trooper6 wrote:This should be in the Demo and Beta Testing thread.
Moved.
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Re: Black Sands Alpha Prologue Demo is looking for criticism
The demo is interesting, but very short. Will have to see more before I can form an opinion.
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