Princess Pajama Speaks to me (Rough Windows Only Demo)

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Princess Pajama Speaks to me (Rough Windows Only Demo)

#1 Post by teaforthecynic » Tue Dec 22, 2015 7:43 pm

http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 11&t=36355

I finished the game

Our hero is effected by the horrible disease of loneliness. Yet, out of his dark situation, he finds a light in the tunnel. Whats this you ask? A glorious work of (Moe) art, entitled Princess Pajama. Yet he finds a secret code. Princess Pajama speaks to him. And she tells him to kill.

Things to expect in full version:

Full Voice Acting ( Partial voice acting is already here.Pm or email me if interested, only 2 more characters are being written without voice actors. both are female)

Art maybe?(PM or email me at alonsobetancor@gmail.com if your interested.)

Demo 2. It is complete.

Download Link:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/0B1Rn7_ ... sp=sharing

Cool Stuff:

*A new scene in the middle of our story, involving our heroes brother, Eric. This is important, as it is currently the only scene to have full voice acting. The rest of the game will soon posses it.

*(Hopefully) Clearer Choices.

*No spelling errors!!(This is a personal achievement.)


Credits

Written and Directed by: Alonso Betancor
Staring: Wiliam Halas
Eric:Truman Williams

Contact me if you are an Voice actor. My email is alonsobetancor@gmail.com.

Currently, the only two roles available are:

Our heroes ex, Faith.

Princess Pajama

Thank you for your time.

Feel free to give me any amount of criticism (Or compliments maybe?)
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Re: Princess Pajama Speaks to me (Rough Windows Only Demo)

#2 Post by kyakyakyu » Tue Dec 22, 2015 10:55 pm

Ooo, full voice acting nom nom nom~
I am interested to voice act~~~

However, if you want to recruit people for your game, you should post it here if this is a free project or here for commercial project or here if you will pay those who will be volunteers in your project.

And oh my God, the errors are so horrible! I'm not trying to be cruel, but I can't read something with too many errors. Thus, I skipped, and those choices even made me even confused.

And please read this thread for further fix of this thread ^^

If there are just art + consistent story (which is already achieved imo; I have no problem with your way of sending your story and plot) + no wording errors such as 'shure' or 'cant' (you'll need a proofreader to realize your goal about 'lesser to no grammatical error), it'll be a great game, I promise.

Hope to see more of this!
・V O I C E A C T I N G ・ T H R E A D・

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#3 Post by teaforthecynic » Tue Dec 22, 2015 11:08 pm

Umm,I know the grammar sucks.But not worry. My voice acting star is also a pretty decent proofreader.Also,can you please describe the errors you experienced?

Please remember, I am a writer first, and a programmer second.

Thank you so much for your honest input. And for once in my life, I will see something throught.

Alonso William Betancor

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#4 Post by kyakyakyu » Thu Dec 24, 2015 7:11 am

The error's not about the crashing, but I can't focus when you typed 'sure' as 'shure', 'can't' as 'cant'...
Basically, that kind of stuff. The game doesn't really experience any crashes since the size is really, really little! However, the way you send the story is lovely (even if I skipped a lot, I sure noticed that at the beginning).
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Re: Princess Pajama Speaks to me (Rough Windows Only Demo)

#5 Post by teaforthecynic » Thu Dec 24, 2015 10:29 am

Either today or tomorrow, I will release a new demo of the game.

Things to expect:

*No grammatical errors.

*A new scene involving our heroes foster brother. This scene is important because I plan on it being the first in the game to have fully implemented voice acting. The rest of the game has none so far (But will have it in the future.)

*Less confusing choice bubbles (Trust me.)

*One new choice, and one new ending.

Thank you for reading, and stay on the edge of your seat for whats to come.

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#6 Post by kyakyakyu » Fri Dec 25, 2015 4:26 am

So far so good! I already play the demo, and I really, really paid my attention of this.
Damn that voice acting was so hawt-

I think I was really harsh since I really hate spelling & grammar errors last time, and there are some typos in the new demo. I will check on the previous demo again. I think the best way to ask about how your demo has progress is to post both demos here, since there might be people who look forward for your demo, and the route in the second demo was different. Or do you avoid spoiling too much things?

Anyways, thank you for receiving my really, really rude and harsh critiques yesterday! :D
Some tips for protagonist's sound, that was HOT. But is he always flat-toned? I noticed your effort to sound convincing in the voicing, which is good! This game actually got some guts, and I'm looking forward to it.
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Re: Princess Pajama Speaks to me (Rough Windows Only Demo)

#7 Post by teaforthecynic » Fri Dec 25, 2015 11:34 am

It is currently flat toned due to the fact nothing particularly emotional takes place in this chapter. It will make it all the better when he eventually has his big mental episode......

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