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Looking for critique: Triple Treat (Visual Novel) - [NSFW / 18+] [Fetish] [Kink] [GxG]

#1 Post by ScreampunkArts » Fri Oct 12, 2018 12:35 am

Hey guys, I thought I'd post here to try and get some feedback & advice on my game.
I make my living via Patreon, as an artist specializing in very niche fetish content, and my usual products are "minigames" of sorts, formerly done in Flash until I made the switch to RPG Maker MV.
I've meddled around with RPG Maker versions for years starting with XP, but never actually made any "proper" games, so I'm familiar with it.

You can find some free demos here: https://www.deviantart.com/screampunkar ... q=rpg+make...
(Warning: NSFW / 18+)

"What are you doing?"
Over 2018, started working on my first full game, inspired by HuniePop, Doki Doki Literature Club, and some of my own life experiences.

The reason I've decided to use RPG Maker to produce a Visual Novel is because:
1) I have some experience with the program's basic functions.
2) I know nothing about any kind of coding languages, which is why I'm not using a more "ideal" engine like Ren'py.
3) I'm going to be implementing "special scenes" using the framework I developed in the various minigames I've made in the past.
4) I hope to break the stigma against RPG Maker, which I believe is only there because people fail to use it to its full potential (I.E using stock assets in finished products, which I feel is unacceptable for a serious developer).
5) At this point, I feel the help I've commissioned and the framework I've built is too deep into RPG Maker to turn back now.

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The main cast of the game, the Troy family.

"What's it about?"
You can find the details about the game here: https://tripletreatgame.tumblr.com/post/176912944142
(Character profiles and development updates are also available on this blog. Again, NSFW / 18+ warning.)
But long story short: You can expect foot fetish, bondage and tickling fetish as themes, but primarily this is a romantic comedy.
Without spoiling anything, the story will become quite deep as I continue development (the current build only covers Chapter 1)
In the story, you play the role of a game design student leaving college for the day, who encounters three wealthy sisters stranded in the rain. The usual VN / harem cycle occurs as you attempt to win the affection of one of them, but there's a little more going on than you realize.

"Where can we play it?"
The most recent build I've put out is what I consider Pre-Alpha v0.007.
PC users can download & play it for free here: https://mega.nz/#!J2oABSqY!cEB94a9_eY6Z ... ih15BIjZIk
(Again, NSFW / 18+ warning.)

"What do you need?"
The reason I'm posting here is to gather absolutely any advice / critique I can from fellow developers and players alike.
Graphics, writing, gameplay, technical stuff, all comments / criticisms are welcome & considered.

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I know it's not for everyone's taste, but I'm hoping to break the stigma of fetish art / games by creating something of reasonable quality with a good story.
Once it enters Beta, I plan to start a crowdfunding  campaign, perhaps via Kimochi Red Light, in order to hire voice actors and commission an original soundtrack.

Thank you for reading, and I hope you enjoy the current build~

Some screenshots: (apparently the spoiler tags aren't working. Sorry. ><)
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#2 Post by philip » Fri Oct 12, 2018 4:04 pm

@ScreampunkArts-

Will it play on a mac?

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#3 Post by parttimestorier » Fri Oct 12, 2018 4:20 pm

I just checked out the tumblr post you linked to and I'm definitely interested now that I see it's "targeted at a lesbian & bisexual female audience"! I'd love to know a little more detail about what you have planned, like what the characters' personalities are like and what roles they would be playing in BDSM scenes. I'm also curious about what you mean in that post when you say it might contain "politically inconvenient opinions". Is there a politics-related plotline in the game?
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#4 Post by ScreampunkArts » Fri Oct 12, 2018 5:08 pm

philip wrote:
Fri Oct 12, 2018 4:04 pm
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Will it play on a mac?

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Only PC currently, but if I can get Mac deployments to work in the future, I'll try.
parttimestorier wrote:
Fri Oct 12, 2018 4:20 pm
I just checked out the tumblr post you linked to and I'm definitely interested now that I see it's "targeted at a lesbian & bisexual female audience"! I'd love to know a little more detail about what you have planned, like what the characters' personalities are like and what roles they would be playing in BDSM scenes. I'm also curious about what you mean in that post when you say it might contain "politically inconvenient opinions". Is there a politics-related plotline in the game?
The goal is to make it primarily a lesbian-focused game, yes; you'll notice the introduction features gender & sex selection for "Female, Other, and Male".
"Other" I would definitely like to add in later for trans folk like myself, or if anyone is into OPTIONAL futa.
I don't know if I'll have the male option for sure; it may end up being a crowdfunding stretch goal. I've left the non-working button there for now just in case.

The characters' personalities should be pretty clear in the downloadable pre-alpha~

"Politically inconvenient opinions" more refers to my sense of humour and how ANYTHING can set "tumblr types" off, so the warning's there just in case.
EDIT: I suppose it might also apply to those who take issue with LGBT people in general, as the story is quite open to help normalize it.
There's no strictly political aspect to this, it's just a yuri rom-com with a fetish flair. :)

About the only message I'm trying to convey is "Porn games can be just as legitimate a storytelling medium as anything else, and fetishes are just harmless tastes that shouldn't be stigmatized, especially by people who claim to be against bullying or kink-shaming.".

Thank you for your interest, I hope you'll enjoy following Triple Treat's development~ ^_^

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#5 Post by ScreampunkArts » Fri Feb 01, 2019 2:46 am

Hey guys, sorry for the lack of updates - life's been seriously hectic the last few months and I just haven't had time to return to the various forums I posted this on.
However, I just dropped v0.007 which has a LOT of changes since the last build I posted, so feel free to give it a try and let me know what you think! :)

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#6 Post by Sonya » Fri Feb 01, 2019 12:56 pm

Hey I think it's really cool you're making a visual novel game with rpg maker. Overall I like the character designs, I think it has this urban vibe to it that makes this game stand out from the rest. I'm bisexual so I'm really into yuri games with strong powerful females with um....big busts that make them super strong and attractive. XD :oops:

I'm excited to see more updates and good luck on your crowdfunding campaign!! All the characters look super sexy (I love blondes hahaha)

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#7 Post by papillon » Fri Feb 01, 2019 4:55 pm

If you can choose to play a male protagonist you might want to adjust the title topic, as right now it looks like it's meant to be lesbian-only.

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#8 Post by ScreampunkArts » Fri Feb 01, 2019 5:25 pm

Sonya wrote:
Fri Feb 01, 2019 12:56 pm
Hey I think it's really cool you're making a visual novel game with rpg maker. Overall I like the character designs, I think it has this urban vibe to it that makes this game stand out from the rest. I'm bisexual so I'm really into yuri games with strong powerful females with um....big busts that make them super strong and attractive. XD :oops:

I'm excited to see more updates and good luck on your crowdfunding campaign!! All the characters look super sexy (I love blondes hahaha)
Thank you very much~ ^_^
I am quite influenced by 80s and punk fashion, and what those eras considered "sci fi". ^^;
Glad to be providing a fetish VN that isn't strictly heterosexual (or just assumes male) for a change, rare as they are~
I don't have as much time to work on this as I'd like, since most of my time is taken up by Patreon commitments, but I'm trying my hardest to make my first game a good one!
papillon wrote:
Fri Feb 01, 2019 4:55 pm
If you can choose to play a male protagonist you might want to adjust the title topic, as right now it looks like it's meant to be lesbian-only.
You can't be male in this; that second option is for "Other", which will affect various aspects later on.
Gender affects dialogue / pronouns, Sex affects the protagonist's appearance, but in either case, there's no strictly "male" option, and this is intended for lesbian & trans folk.
I addressed this a while back on the development blog; you're welcome to check it out as we fortunately survived the Thanos snap: https://tripletreatgame.tumblr.com
If I decide it's worth it, I may even add a "preference" button later on, that would add a non-canon futa version to the sisters.
Once I have the alpha v0.01 ready, I'll be adding in the aspects that are changed by these choices.

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