ebi's quest to awesome game making [please critique]
Posted: Thu Nov 11, 2010 5:29 pm
I hope a thread like this is okay:\
Since I'm trying to develop my drawing/writing/(eventually programming) skills, I thought I could post a thread here in which I could place all my new sketches/ideas/etc. to track my progress.
Especially because I don't really have people to critique my stuff...and I need to hear other people's opinions or else I'll go crazy ( is what I'm writing right?wrong?should it be moresubtle?amidoingthisrightpleasesomeoneTELLMEEEEEE T_T)
*ahem*
A little history:
On another forum I've entered a contest to write a scene for an Otome game script.
That was nearly a month ago (and at the end of this month I'll submit my work). I figured it'd be a fun challenge, 'cause for some reason I like to plunge myself into things in order to gain new experiences. Apart from that, I've always wanted to give a shot at writing... but past attempts have resulted in me crumpling up the papers and giving up out of embarassment.
What I thought would be just a fun thing that "I'd do in just a couple of days" has turned into way more.... and I am totally enjoying this whole process of thinking things out, trying to word it right etc. etc. So along with drawing, I want to continue this and eventually combine it with programming !
Currently I have two projects in my head. The first would be my main project, the one that will take the longest to realize. It's actually based on the scene that I want to write for the contest.
the second one has a much simpler story and overall feel to it. And I will use this one to develop my skills and to break up the work that comes with the first project. I'll probably make a lot of these whilst writing for my main project. I'm mostly doing this because I'm afraid I'll burn out on the other project otherwise. I need a bit of variety.
So for my first two project ideas see below^_-.... man I type way too much.
The whimsy, fun, quick project:
at the moment it's called "sugar buns". I'm not sure why, but it's fun to say!
The concept is very simple and terribly cliche. It's about a girl who discovers that she only has an X amount of days (I think 5-7, since it'd be my first game:p) to get a date for the school's winter dance. Will she snag a date or will she end up alone?
Characters + beginning rough sketches for some form of reference:
While I have an idea, I still need to really pin down attitudes/personalities and such.
Mandy: Mandy is the game's "heroine". she is pretty cheerful but perhaps a bit egocentric/shallow.
James: He's a pretty stereotypical nerd. I still need to nerdify him.
Gregory:he likes to skip school in favor of band practice.
( alberto maybe aurelien maybe kun-kun) AKA
transfer student boy/someone who just moved there, depending on the age I choose them to be: I honestly don't know what to name him yet or what country to have him come from. I was thinking France, Italy or Japan( as a tribute since that's how I got into VNs, by wanting to learn Japanese XD). he loves food.
Freddie: a girl who pretty much idolizes Mandy (for whatever reason). She's very shy but might get in the way of Mandy's date hunt.
I really don't know what age to give these characters. But I was thinking around 13-14. I want the game to be mostly cute and innocent ( a big contrast to the other game I suppose).
Since I've already typed up WAY too much - and I congratulate anyone who's come to the end of this ( you get a gold star ^_^)-
I'll save the main project for later, or if you must, you can check it out on my blog ( http://www.otomehell.blogspot.com ), I'm doing some warm up writing just to place the setting/characters and from there I'll continue ( search for chapters or chapter or something).
In short it's => girl ends up in the future => girl meets boys, angers one boy => girl finds way to the present or ???
But if you'd prefer that I post a chapter/outline here, just say so.
A couple more things:
Up until three months ago, I was still drawing stick figures, wishing that I could draw (for yearrrs) (now I'm trying to make that reality through perseverance!).
And.... the last story I wrote before starting this up... was when I was in grade 3 (15 years ago).
So I'm terribly sorry if all of this looks like utter *bleep* >_< but I'm definitely wanting to improve!
Since I'm trying to develop my drawing/writing/(eventually programming) skills, I thought I could post a thread here in which I could place all my new sketches/ideas/etc. to track my progress.
Especially because I don't really have people to critique my stuff...and I need to hear other people's opinions or else I'll go crazy ( is what I'm writing right?wrong?should it be moresubtle?amidoingthisrightpleasesomeoneTELLMEEEEEE T_T)
*ahem*
A little history:
On another forum I've entered a contest to write a scene for an Otome game script.
That was nearly a month ago (and at the end of this month I'll submit my work). I figured it'd be a fun challenge, 'cause for some reason I like to plunge myself into things in order to gain new experiences. Apart from that, I've always wanted to give a shot at writing... but past attempts have resulted in me crumpling up the papers and giving up out of embarassment.
What I thought would be just a fun thing that "I'd do in just a couple of days" has turned into way more.... and I am totally enjoying this whole process of thinking things out, trying to word it right etc. etc. So along with drawing, I want to continue this and eventually combine it with programming !
Currently I have two projects in my head. The first would be my main project, the one that will take the longest to realize. It's actually based on the scene that I want to write for the contest.
the second one has a much simpler story and overall feel to it. And I will use this one to develop my skills and to break up the work that comes with the first project. I'll probably make a lot of these whilst writing for my main project. I'm mostly doing this because I'm afraid I'll burn out on the other project otherwise. I need a bit of variety.
So for my first two project ideas see below^_-.... man I type way too much.
The whimsy, fun, quick project:
at the moment it's called "sugar buns". I'm not sure why, but it's fun to say!
The concept is very simple and terribly cliche. It's about a girl who discovers that she only has an X amount of days (I think 5-7, since it'd be my first game:p) to get a date for the school's winter dance. Will she snag a date or will she end up alone?
Characters + beginning rough sketches for some form of reference:
While I have an idea, I still need to really pin down attitudes/personalities and such.
Mandy: Mandy is the game's "heroine". she is pretty cheerful but perhaps a bit egocentric/shallow.
James: He's a pretty stereotypical nerd. I still need to nerdify him.
Gregory:he likes to skip school in favor of band practice.
( alberto maybe aurelien maybe kun-kun) AKA
transfer student boy/someone who just moved there, depending on the age I choose them to be: I honestly don't know what to name him yet or what country to have him come from. I was thinking France, Italy or Japan( as a tribute since that's how I got into VNs, by wanting to learn Japanese XD). he loves food.
Freddie: a girl who pretty much idolizes Mandy (for whatever reason). She's very shy but might get in the way of Mandy's date hunt.
I really don't know what age to give these characters. But I was thinking around 13-14. I want the game to be mostly cute and innocent ( a big contrast to the other game I suppose).
Since I've already typed up WAY too much - and I congratulate anyone who's come to the end of this ( you get a gold star ^_^)-
I'll save the main project for later, or if you must, you can check it out on my blog ( http://www.otomehell.blogspot.com ), I'm doing some warm up writing just to place the setting/characters and from there I'll continue ( search for chapters or chapter or something).
In short it's => girl ends up in the future => girl meets boys, angers one boy => girl finds way to the present or ???
But if you'd prefer that I post a chapter/outline here, just say so.
A couple more things:
Up until three months ago, I was still drawing stick figures, wishing that I could draw (for yearrrs) (now I'm trying to make that reality through perseverance!).
And.... the last story I wrote before starting this up... was when I was in grade 3 (15 years ago).
So I'm terribly sorry if all of this looks like utter *bleep* >_< but I'm definitely wanting to improve!