[CRITIQUE PLEASE] My 'Art'

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[CRITIQUE PLEASE] My 'Art'

#1 Post by miyoyan » Wed Nov 17, 2010 2:25 am

Hello, buenos días, こんにちは, bonjour, AVETE [that last one is actual Latin... if my memory doesn't fail me. Since the other thing that I failed was 3rd year Latin, it very well might.] Bon giorno, too, though I'm not even sure whether that's spelt correctly.


My handle is Miyod, and I'm a... person. I can't say I'm an artist. I do draw occasionally, but the word seems too... big, for me. I'm just a girl who likes drawing.
I've been drawing for something like four, five years now. I'm pretty inconsistent (maybe that's the only constant in my 'art'). Sometimes I feel like I SOMEHOW did something nice, then look at it a month later and go red in the face with shame (... no hyperbole there, that actually happens).
Most of the time, drawing something ends up taking so much time because actual mistakes and my perfectionism that I just get bored with it.

So, I came to the realisation that I need two things: confidence, or at least no shame at all; and PRACTICE. I want to take up some lessons, but I don't have time (or money: sad, cruel student life) right now.


Styles I can (maybe, kind of, well, I think?) pull off: various manga styles, kind of realistic style, stick figures.
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Special Skills: imitating other people's styles. Learning anatomy while bored in the bus (by staring at people. Hey, it's crowded, I'm little and can fit in the smallest of places, they don't notice. And a crowded bus makes people make the strangest poses, which comes in really handy!) (ok, the actual skill is 'learning things just by looking at them a few times, even subconsciously. For example, by flipping through an anatomy book')
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(If you guess whose style I was going for, I win.)

Biggest weaknesses: lack of patience; hands, feet (well, most people have trouble with those. I bought a HEAVY book called 'Human Anatomy for Artists' the other day.).
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Has never drawn: backgrounds, animals other than humans.


And so, the intro ends.
I came here for critique. Polite, but straightforward critique. I love red lines over my work. They not only make me realise what's wrong -- it fixes it too! (And I can learn a bunch from them). Even if it's a small mistake, or a 'well, it COULD be like that, but I think you were aiming for something more like...', please, tell me!

Thank you a lot for your time. I really ranted there, didn't I? Well, on to the actual drawings. One is an early design for a character, the other two are more about anatomy and silly poses that you really should think too much about, because really, what the hell is he doing?

http://img233.imageshack.us/img233/805/saimini.png


http://img197.imageshack.us/img197/3195 ... 2bmini.png
(The part of the arm going behind his back is in blue)
Bigger version here: http://img405.imageshack.us/img405/9837/sketch022b.png


http://img694.imageshack.us/img694/1038 ... 22mini.png
Bigger version here: http://img194.imageshack.us/img194/3269/sketch022.png



Thank you VERY MUCH!
(Oh, you are free to correct my English too :lol: )
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#2 Post by Auro-Cyanide » Wed Nov 17, 2010 2:44 am

I think you are doing quite well :) You also seem to have quite the flare for writing too.

You are definitely going on the right direction with learning and most of the problems you are coming across are common to most people.

I like the way you have painted the manga styled artwork, looks cool. The main thing I could mention critique wise is that the knee of the anatomy figure could use some more definition to indicate the knee cap and the other bones. But apart from that it is a very promising start/continuation. Keep up the good work ^^

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#3 Post by miyoyan » Wed Nov 17, 2010 2:56 am

Woah, that was fast!!

You are referring to his left kneecap, right? Hm. I tried to convey that with some shading, but I guess you are right, it could use more work. Thank you very much!

And... yes, I like writing (and talking!). I'm don't have a whole lot of confidence when it comes to writing in English, but in my native tongue you better not become my friend, lest you end up buried beneath a mountain of (spoken) words.

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#4 Post by Auro-Cyanide » Wed Nov 17, 2010 3:09 am

Yeah, the shading does help with the form, but a couple lines wouldn't hurt in this case. Males tend to have stronger forms and shapes because of the bones and muscles that aren't covered in fat so you can afford to be a little stronger with your line work. I think you did a good job regardless though, foreshortening is a pain. I can't do it without some kind of reference most of the time.

I think you are really good at english (better then a lot of native speakers), I wouldn't pick you out as being non-english originally.

ps. the stick figure is sooo cute~

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#5 Post by miyoyan » Wed Nov 17, 2010 3:24 am

<--- Is actually drinking Earl Grey tea while writing this.
I think you are really good at english (better then a lot of native speakers), I wouldn't pick you out as being non-english originally.
That really means a lot to me <3 See, I've always loved languages :> (and English is pretty much a requirement in the 'net these days. I do have a spell-checker add-on, though :lol:). And I dream with moving to Canada and leaving my country behind (well, I'd come back on holidays :D Argentina is a nice place... for tourism).
(As a side note, I love Commonwealth spelling. I have a pretty noticeable 'standard' [see: posh :) ] British [English] accent too. It drives Americans nuts. One of them has been trying to 'convert' me, even. I love it~)

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#6 Post by emihaumut » Wed Nov 17, 2010 2:33 pm

For the last two, you might want to reconsider the left (his right) arm. Try doing the pose yourself; you should see that your left palm faces upward and not downwards.

And your english is pretty good. If that's not your first language, what is (if I may ask)?

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#7 Post by miyoyan » Wed Nov 17, 2010 3:40 pm

I actually tried both poses (palm upwards and downwards). Anatomically, both are possible, at least for a woman. But, it's true that it may look better with the palm upwards (because of the rest of the pose).

Thank you very much ^_^

Of course you may :> It's Spanish. I'm from the Capital City of Argentina, so I speak a pretty distinctive kind of Spanish too (the 'rioplantese' variety).

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#8 Post by charmwitch » Wed Nov 17, 2010 4:56 pm

Aw man, Spanish is my first language too! I'm awful at typing it out, though. :(
I think you're on a great track, too! So here are some things I have bookmarked for myself in terms of tutorials and things to keep in mind :

Posemaniacs : http://posemaniacs.com/
Basic Guide to the Human Body : http://img76.imageshack.us/i/bodytutorialnp1.jpg/
Design Lesson Blog : http://designlesson.blogspot.com/
Studio 2nd Street Tutorials : http://www.studio2ndstreet.com/tutorials.html

Alexds1's tutorials are really fun too:
http://fav.me/d1dvt5y
http://fav.me/d16vfl2

Just keep it up! Draw whenever you're idle, bring out a sketchbook wherever! I go through five or so sketchbooks a year on top of my digital drawings, and I'm still not doing enough...

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#9 Post by miyoyan » Wed Nov 17, 2010 5:05 pm

*Opens third link*

*Enters learning trance*
º__________º ..... woah....


*gets out of trance for a sec*

I already knew posemaniacs, it's one of my bookmarks >w< I should make use of it more, though ^^;
I also have the picture in the second link, I took it from... DeviantArt? Who knows. I should order it printed and hang it on my wall, it's THAT great.
Third link... is awesome. AWESOME.

I'll check the rest of the links later, but I'm sure they'll come in really handy. I guess this will become kind of a catchphrase of mine, but, THANK YOU VERY MUCH!

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