The GXB Rebellion[otome]

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The GXB Rebellion[otome]

#1 Post by ofdawnandtwilight » Mon Dec 20, 2010 2:07 am

NOTE: Hi there ^^ This old thread has been necromanced by a few lovely people here so if you're interested in this, then I highly suggest that you ignore every page from 1-7 as the contents there are ridiculously outdated. Feel free to check for any updates from page 8 and so forth, thank you c: (And there are pictures here, I swear :O)

THE GXB REBELLION
Vivaldast, a country both of wonders and advancement are diverged into two with women as Researchers and the men as Fighters. With a sudden foray from the men, the country has been in war for nearly 8 years now and unfortunately with no acknowledgement of the reason of such bloodshed.
Sethra Hopeland, a young unofficial Researcher, due to her cunning habits of troublemaking and witty attitude was specifically sent as a spy to gather any valuable information from the men as she disguised as one of them herself. A month was the only time she and her mythical companion, Ash had before arrived the rumoured Ending Day, 2nd Gold. Would she be able to find a way to gain victory of the war? Would she be able to find out what even caused it or maybe, would she experience something that she never had expected within the time with her enemies...?


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The game contains 1,269 dialogue blocks, containing 14,426 words and 79,953
characters, for an average of 11.4 words and 63 characters per block.

The game contains 6 menus, 0 images, and 14 screens.

(I'll be updating this OP later on so I hope you'll stay tuned and watch for updates, thank you :D)
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#2 Post by YuukiCrossPudding » Mon Dec 20, 2010 2:24 am

I think that's a interesting story :3
I want to help, but I just can make the script
Maybe I could do the outline and the drawing (maybe...must see the sketch first ToT)
Because I'm still learning myself...

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#3 Post by ofdawnandtwilight » Mon Dec 20, 2010 2:28 am

YuukiCrossPudding wrote:I think that's a interesting story :3
I want to help, but I just can make the script
Maybe I could do the outline and the drawing (maybe...must see the sketch first ToT)
Because I'm still learning myself...
Alright thank you very much!! i'll post the sketches in a minute!

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#4 Post by ofdawnandtwilight » Mon Dec 20, 2010 3:12 am

nero279 wrote:
YuukiCrossPudding wrote:I think that's a interesting story :3
I want to help, but I just can make the script
Maybe I could do the outline and the drawing (maybe...must see the sketch first ToT)
Because I'm still learning myself...
Alright thank you very much!! i'll post the sketches in a minute!

AND IF I COULD FIND ANY PEOPLE TO HELP, YOU COULD ALSO HELP WITH THE SCRIPT

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#5 Post by YuukiCrossPudding » Mon Dec 20, 2010 3:23 am

well I look at your drawing, I'll work for it in a moment
hm...would you mind if I fix it here and there?
btw I love to help you with the script
well this isn't much but I make some sprite myself
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#6 Post by ofdawnandtwilight » Mon Dec 20, 2010 3:27 am

YuukiCrossPudding wrote:well I look at your drawing, I'll work for it in a moment
hm...would you mind if I fix it here and there?
btw I love to help you with the script
well this isn't much but I make some sprite myself
oh i saw this in your deviantart your art is beautiful
i'll use this sprite for the *hem,hem* :mrgreen: (if this game exist.....)
and you could adjust my drawings a bit for return i'll adjust yours if that's okay with you

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#7 Post by YuukiCrossPudding » Mon Dec 20, 2010 3:35 am

Well finished!
I hope it's not bad...
ToT
I really bad at coloring...
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#8 Post by ofdawnandtwilight » Mon Dec 20, 2010 3:40 am

YuukiCrossPudding wrote:Well finished!
I hope it's not bad...
ToT
I really bad at coloring...
i think that the outline should be thinner and the skin tone should be shaded
but you did a good job
try to look at this video for reference just in case

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mWAby8VsVvk&feature=sub

try checking her channel also and deviantart
www.lovemagnet.deviantart.com
she's my mentor :oops:

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#9 Post by YuukiCrossPudding » Mon Dec 20, 2010 3:50 am

Woooh O_O
That's awesome!
what program she used?
I'm searching for a good program for making these but still..
ToT

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#10 Post by Auro-Cyanide » Mon Dec 20, 2010 3:57 am

@Yuuki Paint Sai and a tablet.

For this game, unless you are going for the comedic/parody route, I would want a really, really good reason for females and males to fight each other. For that matter I would want a very good reason as why the females are still able to fight. A human population usually sits around 50% for males and female because of the chance of a child being male or female. Unless all the females are Amazons or have some advantage, such as technology, they wouldn't be able to hold against males. Males have the advantage on strength, physique and psyche. Though if you can write it well, it could be very interesting, I would just want pretty good rationales, unless it isn't meant to be serious.

A good example of females and males at war in a really serious sense would be the Black Jewel Series (series of books, not for young ones though) The overview of it is
One strong and ambitious female wanted power. She gathered like minded people and destroyed the stronger opponents and potential threats. She twisted the weaker males and chained the stronger ones when they were young. The males, fearful of females reaching powerful maturity, destroyed them while young. Females, fearing the males, chained powerful young males. Thus a dangerous spiral was created were the strong destroyed potential threats. This is set in a world were females are the stronger sex and are meant to rule, and males are to serve and protect. The spiral is a corruption of what they are and why the war between the sexes will eventually destroy them all.
This is a rather dark example, but it is rationally built up and both sides have a reason for doing what they do. Females and males wouldn't fight each other without good reason. Plus, it has a pretty good stance as to how females stand against males you are physically stronger.
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#11 Post by ofdawnandtwilight » Mon Dec 20, 2010 3:59 am

Auro-Cyanide wrote:@Yuuki Paint Sai and a tablet.
yep paint tool sai the program that ive been cursed by ^_^"

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#12 Post by YuukiCrossPudding » Mon Dec 20, 2010 4:05 am

Tablet,...ToT
I must wait until I've go to my vacation so I can buy one...
I really really want it for my birthday+Christmas present
hope I'll find one...
cursed??? why?

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#13 Post by Lumen_Astrum » Mon Dec 20, 2010 4:09 am

Oooh, sounds like a nice storyline~
A world where there is a war between girls and boys? Winn~
Sounds like my cup of tea~ :D

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#14 Post by ofdawnandtwilight » Mon Dec 20, 2010 4:14 am

YuukiCrossPudding wrote:Tablet,...ToT
I must wait until I've go to my vacation so I can buy one...
I really really want it for my birthday+Christmas present
hope I'll find one...
cursed??? why?
no,no,no you dont have to buy any
tablets are optional
Paint Tool Sai is important cause all you have to do is outline,edit, color, shade
tablets are for drawing purposes
and im cursed cos i cant use it anymore without buying sai ^_^"
theres a trial there (if u dont wanna pay)
when it finishes, youll need to uninstall at the start tab and then install the trial again
but i did an error before i know that so i cant use it anymore
dont spam me about the sai trial not paying thing ^_^"

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#15 Post by ofdawnandtwilight » Mon Dec 20, 2010 4:16 am

Lumen_Astrum wrote:Oooh, sounds like a nice storyline~
A world where there is a war between girls and boys? Winn~
Sounds like my cup of tea~ :D
thanks and sorry bout the fantasia thing..........
but wish the game luck to find any recruitments and everyone's help
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