It's probably unfair to review a demo and discuss anyting other than the style. Now that Delta and Jinzou have ragejerked each other to the point of needing a cigarette and eventually picking out a china pattern, let's take a more objective look.
It's not a very interesting story. It isn't. I don't mean "It needs more giant-eyed 2D girls who I can pretend like me," I mean on its own it's taking too long to engage me as a reader.
I'm not drawn in, I don't give a fuck about the poor political prisoner being ripped to pieces by the crowd, and the choices being offered during an interview have the following two reactions from me:
- If I'm an experienced reporter, how much chance is there in my methodology?
- These are false choices, aren't they?
The model for the psychiatrist looks like an intern at best. Stop using your friends and coworkers as photographic models if you're serious about this.
The "people in the street" remind me too much of the segment from The Onion. We get it, people are stupid, move along.
"How can I trust another..." is a cliche. If you have to use it, don't leave this much time between the setup and the punchline for the audience to mock you for using it.
Put a face to this political prisoner character earlier in the story. Like the opening credits if need be.
Overall, you deserve credit for doing something new with the stuff. But don't coast on it.