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Demon Wraith (Indiegogo campaign) [Action][horror][Supernatural][Windows and Android]
Posted: Mon Apr 15, 2019 8:17 pm
by Gouka
Re: Demon Wraith (Indiegogo campaign) [Action][horror][Supernatural][Windows and Android]
Posted: Tue Apr 16, 2019 7:48 am
by andalusian
i will try the demo shortly, but before that: the promotional texts have some grammar and style errors, they could use a read-over from a native English speaker. if i were considering funding the project, it would slightly lower my confidence in it, first impressions are important and all that.
for example:
https://img.itch.zone/aW1nLzE4NzMxOTMuc ... aUTeOm.png "He's [...] reluctant of him" - this is not how "reluctant" is used; although isnt that redundant with "suspicious" anyway? simply "He's highly suspicious of Vincent and who he works for." would be best, i think
https://img.itch.zone/aW1nLzE4NzMxODAuc ... rblOJ9.png "None of you are Safe" - in English, words are not capitalized for emphasis
https://img.itch.zone/aW1nLzE4NzMxOTEuc ... ZpONkR.png "and always ready" should be "and is always ready", because "has" from the beginning of the sentence does not fit as the verb for that part, so the verb would be just missing
Re: Demon Wraith (Indiegogo campaign) [Action][horror][Supernatural][Windows and Android]
Posted: Sun Apr 21, 2019 4:08 pm
by Gouka
No more replies? This really sucks.
Re: Demon Wraith (Indiegogo campaign) [Action][horror][Supernatural][Windows and Android]
Posted: Sat May 25, 2019 12:13 pm
by andalusian
it seemed very promising
* many typoes
* main character and best friend look too similar
* very good art
* a glitch during the captains speech - multiple talking sprites of him appear on top of each other
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in the scene where you choose to open the door, the picture with the alien monstrosity is shown immediately and the anxious music starts immediately... they should probably wait until the text reaches the line where the main character sees them
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it made for an effective demo, but the aliens are shown "at full power" very soon after the game starts... usually in movies like this, the monsters are only gradually revealed, so the player can speculate; it felt rushed
Re: Demon Wraith (Indiegogo campaign) [Action][horror][Supernatural][Windows and Android]
Posted: Sat Jun 08, 2019 1:04 am
by Gouka
andalusian wrote: ↑Sat May 25, 2019 12:13 pm
it seemed very promising
* many typoes
* main character and best friend look too similar
* very good art
* a glitch during the captains speech - multiple talking sprites of him appear on top of each other
*
in the scene where you choose to open the door, the picture with the alien monstrosity is shown immediately and the anxious music starts immediately... they should probably wait until the text reaches the line where the main character sees them
*
it made for an effective demo, but the aliens are shown "at full power" very soon after the game starts... usually in movies like this, the monsters are only gradually revealed, so the player can speculate; it felt rushed
Thanks for the input, but I have a question:
What do you mean that the main character and the best friend look too similar? They have very different designs.
I fixed the bug with the Captain and another one I found.